by MSTarot
...Which there were a lot of; But MAN, Can YOU ever write!!!
Do yourself a favor and get an editor; but even if you don't, keep Writing!
Well done, and the twist at the end switching from the boys perspective to his sisters was brilliant.
Whether erotica or otherwise you have a knack for story telling, so please keep writing.
Awesome, i would have liked to hear more about the world as it died. You should write a sequel as she explores what's left of the world . It reminded me of "The Road"
Enjoyed reading the story, Dec 21st is just 7 months away, as you stated in the beginning of your story there has been so many dooms days forecast playing on the fears of people for years.
You left room for another story with little sister surviving, too bad you didn't have her get pregnant by her brother so she and her child could build another new world.
Bummed me out that he and his mom didn't survive, and for his mom not to get to have his baby while they were still in the bunker.
Thanks for the read.
that ending really bummed me out... no adam and eve scenario because bro died...
I've never read apocolyptic erotica before, but this had me hooked all the way through. My only complaint was that the end was a bit confusing at first glance when the 1st person narration shifted to the sister without notice, other than that... A+
I have a big problem with you're writing of the word threw, when it should be through. Other than that, I enjoyed this tale very much. More please!
Erotica this is not. Yet it was so surreal your spelling mistakes were almost unnoticed. I agree with the reader who said you need to write sci-fi instead. If your world comes to pass I hope I'm killed in the first blast.
Re: "I have a big problem with you're writing of the word threw, when it should be through." I HAVE A BIG PROBLEM WITH YOUR WRITING OF THE WORD 'YOU'RE', WHEN IT SHOULD BE 'YOUR'.
Once I realized what was happening I couldn't stop reading. I would have liked more detail but the way you wrote the story was wherein which the magic occurred!
Now I want to hear what Jennifer has been doing to address her hormonal cravings for all these years. Don't mind me. I am a sicko.
Well done again MSTarot. ~~~~~~>. Fav Auth List
First off, you are an amazing writer. I've read a few of your other works, and I love them all. You do write some dark shit though..... But I like dark shit!! It would be cool if you continued this. I mean, what are the odds of her actually being the last women on Earth? Lol!! Keep 'em cumming!!!
How about an option for a dfferent ending?
I find it funny the closer to the December date we get the lower the score on this one goes. Maybe people are not liking the fact that the events of the story haven't unfolded the way I wrote them.
I for one am glad my ability to predict the future was so far off.
End of the world party at my house.
M.S.Tarot
As you will see by the date the end of my world was a total washout. Sarcasm.
I have been watching the whacko's and note they don't seem to be able to talk about it without some form of primitive dance.
It is all based on a calender put together by an all but extinct tribe and they have also usurped another calender set up some thousand plus years ago by some darn poor religious mathematicians arguing between Rome and Greece.
According to the best info I can get, it really is 2016 as I write this and the star of Bethlehem really went through early in what is now November.
Didn't those fourth century ecclesiastics get it so damn wrong?
Sod 'em all I liked your story.
I was looking for an incest story, a good old fashioned son fucks mom story. Instead I got a great what if! Like other commenters I wish that it was a multi chapter novela, but I'll take what I could get!!!!
This has a lot of possibilities. With the gloom and doom in the past, he could have many offsprings with his mother and sister in a loving manner to repopulate the world!
Should have left the brother inside the inner bunker to be alive to continue on with his sister.
It must be a bunch of fun living with you eh? What a cheery so and so you are.
I support most of the other comments. You went the wrong direction with the ending. Mum and sister both pregnant. The start of civilisation and all that stuff. A little disappointed this time. 4 stars
Give us a break, there are enough problems in the world and we do not need to have this kind of depressive stuff here on this forum.
Please consider taking medication for your condition!
I love a reader that gets so offended by fiction that he has to ask the author to remove a story. MSTarot has written a grim story, but other than a few typos it is well done and believable in context. I've read several of his stories and all are well thought out and well written. Keep up the great work.
Your spelling is still atrocious, and the story was rather depressing. But, I still read it through. Off the beaten track, but, could have been a lot worse.
I really like your style of writing and the story is great. However, it almost seems as if you dictated that story; some of the words sound similar, but are written differently (through - threw). Very interesting.
Yet another great story from yourself. I would say that the transition at the end wasn’t that smooth though. I feel like it could have ended better.
I believe if people read your bio, they would understand that you are a writer. Not just of erotica but of short stories. That you have so many interesting plots with so many twists is to be commended. Not criticized. I just recently discovered you and I tend to savor these in small doses like a really good bourbon.
I realize that this will probabaly never be read by the author, but they really need an editor. For example: the use of threw for through; trimmers for tremors; and an oldie but goodie, shutters for shudders. And this is not just in this story. I've seen the same thing in several of this author's works. The stories are imaginative and the narrative well-done, but really....