All Comments on 'Vampire's Lust Ch. 02'

Very entertaining. One thing I would say is get an editor or proof read it. Also, mix up the metaphors instead of repeating the same words and phrases. Other than that, very nice! Love the characters and your descriptions!

Why would he mark up his property. Every scratch mark he made will now have a small scar...why would he di that and then he says he loves her. I would run so fast you'd see wind behind me. Sick ass.

really liked this but you do need to get an editor or something