- All
Comments (5) - Add a
Comment - Send
Feedback Send private anonymous feedback to the author (click here to post a public comment instead).
| Literotica Toy Store ADULT TOY & DVD STORE FAST & DISCREET |
Literotica XXX Webcams 24/7 LIVE CAMS - FREE PREVIEW W/AUDIO! |
Literotica Adult Movies STREAMING ADULT MOVIES PAY PER MINUTE |
English
Good start
I enjoyed this first chapter and will be interested to see where you take this. I would suggest you get a proofreader because I found some errors that could easily be caught be a second pair of eyes. Keep it up.
Nice Beginning
I liked the characters and the setup. As previously mentioned, a few minor errors. There are a lot of ways the situation could jump and I would be interested in reading more. Welcome to Literotica.
good start . hope you continue with this series....
So far so good...
You made a nice start, now where are you going to take it?
Nice start
to what I hope will be a sweet love story. Rather than a a tawdry one night stand. With that title it could go either way.
Click here to leave your own comment on this submission! or
Back to A Moment in Time or
More submissions by morgan_lynn.