I really enjoyed this story and found myself disappointed when it came to an end. Please tell me that part 2 is coming soon?
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Anonymous06/09/12
Not much good
The idea was good but the execution was not. The dialogue was stilted, the plot moved too fast, some things were preposterous like 4 inch areolas, clinical language like scrotum, testicles, and penis. I suggest getting an editor and giving it another go.
English
Great but short
I really enjoyed this story and found myself disappointed when it came to an end. Please tell me that part 2 is coming soon?
Not much good
The idea was good but the execution was not. The dialogue was stilted, the plot moved too fast, some things were preposterous like 4 inch areolas, clinical language like scrotum, testicles, and penis. I suggest getting an editor and giving it another go.
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