Need For Revenge Ch. 01

Implausible.

My first response would have been to try to beat the three of them. 2nd would have been to leave and come back with a gun or cleaver and start a blood bath. Those would not have been smart moves but I would have done something instead of sitting down and watch the wife getting screwed by other men. The smart move would have been to take pictures and call the cop.

Why DGH writes this crap when it is so outrageously ridiculous I don't exactly know, but I have suspicion that he thinks it's normal as masturbation, exposure to seeing his mom screwing notwithstanding. Which means that he must be a wife watcher, which is not all that surprising considering his fascination wives and girl friends in all of his stories. There is no other explanation if he's writing to a wife watching audience.

I gave it a 5 too...

Well written, good plot so far, pulled me in for more.

Five Stars

I Like the Approach he is taking. Think before you act you can get better Revenge after knowing all of the Facts.

So Far, So Good

Good set-up. Kind of painful reading the cuck/voyeurism scene, but I'm looking forward to future installments.

This start is just so-so; I don't know if I will continue.

Do editors also proofread? (I view editing and proofreading as different things.) This needed some editing AND proofreading to make the story better.

I think I would have stepped out of the room

walked down the hall,
and pulled the fire alarm!

STORIES ALWAYS CHANGE

depending on who is telling and whom is listening, TK U MLJ LV NV

Interesting Beginning

So the wife cheated with old friends and the husband left and filed for divorce. Sounds like a normal scenario. Let's see what happens next...

Let the pain begin -

Doesn't Learn From Experience

After living with his mother, why he would marry a flirty party girl is beyond me!

Enjoyed it

A bit bare bones.

You need a better editor!

Remind me not to use Estragon as my editor! The first third of the story you just repeated yourself....and grammar is bad. The story concept itself is not too bad and I will try another chapter and try to look past the errors that make it hard to read.

need for revenge ch.01

the ending was fucked up not long enough

HERE IS WHERE CHOICES ARE MADE

between needs and wants. TK U MLJ LV NV

Just Another Slut

"Jim, I'm sorry. It was a mistake, I drank too much. I didn't mean for that to happen."

Like she didn't mean for the dirty dancing to happen, even after he asked her to stop.

Taste of Cum

I'm so sick of women not letting men come or swallowing cum. It isn't a matter of what it tastes like. You have to develop a taste for coffee, booze, most vegetables. Giving a blow job like eating pussy isn't a matter of what it tastes or smells like, its about doing something loving for someone you love. Unless it is itself something inherently evil, immoral or destructive one can talk oneself into almost anything. You talked yourself into believing swallowing cum or licking a vagina is disgusting, you can talk yourself into believing it is about loving your partner. You want something that's disgusting try changing a toddler's toxic diaper. If you are a loving parent you never consider not doing it.

Job requirement?

"...Dad travelled a lot, because he was a truck driver. So I know they both constantly cheated on each other".
Huh? How do you make the leap from him driving a truck for a living to him constantly cheating? Is it a job requirement for a trucker? Granted, I don't know many truckers, but I've never heard one say, "When I was interviewed, my boss asked if I had a licence, ever been arrested and if I cheated on my wife! I lost my damn job because I'm faithful!"
That's like saying; "I know you're cheating, because you have blonde hair!" Or "That guy is cheating on his wife, because he drives a bus!"

"I had to go with multiple chapters because of the length."

I disagree!

What you gave us was too short. Too brief. Too disconnected to be relevant.

Thoughts

"I can't file charges against them. Everyone will know I was raped." – And why is that a problem? Would you rather they know you’re a cheating slut?

@Anonymous 03/04/15 – I don’t have a particular problem with a woman (or a man for that matter!) not wanting a man to cum in their mouth, whether it be the taste, texture or whatever. What puzzles me is why after letting a man cum in their mouth, they then refuse to swallow. If it’s already in the mouth, what does it hurt to swallow it?

5 stars

I waited to read the whole story, then returned here to comment. The language, actions and plot all dovetail together for a simple working class triangle, no, it's more complecated than that. Trust me, stick wiith it to the end. You won't be sorry. At last a cheaters story that actually leaves you feeling good, maybe cause there's a little love story mixed in with it.

Second time through...

Thanks for the offering.

Can't believe he just watched and did nothing...

Two things:

First: Why split the story up the way you did? Why not just put all the pages into one part or group - why split it into 4 parts? It reminds of that old joke: Do you want your pizza cut into 6 or 8 pieces? Answer: Better cut it into 6 pieces, I don't know if I'm hungry enough to eat 8.

Second: When you come into a hotel room and see three guys having sex with your wife, you don't just stand there and watch - knife or no knife. His first thought should have been which guy to hit first, which guy gets kicked in the nuts, which guy gets slammed in the head with the telephone, etc. Grab up some luggage as a shield, make some noise, throw stuff, bite, kick, whatever you have to do. So what if he has a knife? That's your wife, you idiot! So what if he stabs you or cuts you? You can worry about the blood later and besides, chicks dig scars. Even if they stick that knife in your chest, do you think they're gonna continue raping your wife while you lay on the floor bleeding out? The goal is to stop the rape, whatever it takes. Hell, if I saw a woman getting raped that I didn't even know, I'd still fight for her. Jeeze.

And if he's too scared to fight for his wife, why didn't he at least call the police when he left the room? Why didn't he report a rape and attempted murder? The guy inside still has the knife, his wife and rapists are still in the room, let the cops sort it out. He heard his wife tell them to get up and let her go - they said No and told her she was gonna pull a train. Doesn't matter what she did to start it, she wants to leave now - they said No - now it's rape, and the knife means its aggravated. Sticking that 'aggravated' onto a charge is a BIG deal - lots of years in the pound-you-in-the-ass prison. But NO, this guy just leaves her there???

This guy is both cowardly and stupid; regardless of what happens from here on out, there's nobody to root for in this story. He needs to stay single if he has no intention of risking an injury to save his wife. Holy cow. What a wuss, no respect for him whatsoever. Total loser. He's too weak to have a wife.

Hear this

I cannot for the life of me figure out why in the hell people post shit that ends on a cliff.
WTF is the point? Go post your tired ass nonsense on your feeble face book page.