by DG Hear
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Jerry in Washington state, USA - I'm looking forward to the revenge. I hope he comes up with something special for everyone. I have recently started re-reading fave stories by fave writers. I'll be re-reading your stories soon. Thanks for the reading pleasure you've given me the past few years.
Though our protagonist does not count with my personal support. He just is too slippery and accepts too many things. Now, Mary Anne is an excellent villainess. It is fun to have her..
You should know better then that! Honestly! Everyone who follows your stories is probably looking in LW. By bumping it to 'non-erotic' you are going to KILL your follow up. The only reason I found it was because I was checking the comments on the first story.
Get it changed or accept a quarter of the readers.
So far you have less than 2 pages full in two chapters. the whole thing would probably have been three full pages, which equals a nice length for a story posted all in one pile. Short, dull chapters do make great reading.
the delay. The chapters are not that long. The wait has ruined the story. Not your usual quality. Post # 3 and 4 together. Perhaps we can have some closure. I think this would have been a better story in one post.
Thanks!
It is a good story. The chapters are to short. Why the big delay. I like a long story. But hate not having it together. Put it all together.
The storyline is good, but you should not use the younger sister for second chance for 3 years in your next stories!
BTW 5 stars
Stop with this idiocy and get back to the DG we know!!!!!
I only found this chapter after checking reader comments on Chapter One.
I like the story, but because of all the build-up, Jim really needs to come up with something special for his revenge against Rob and his friends, as well as his cheating ex-wife. If it is anything short of painful yet justified retribution, most of the readers are going to be disappointed.
The story maintains my total interest, and although it began as a "Loving Wife" story see why DG Hear changed the subject setting for chapter 2 (from chapter 1). The DNA test will now determine whether Jim does or does not pay for child support.
Jim needs to stay with Kathy. She appears to be a winner. Plus she will soon by a nurse and thus a professional women.
So ,,,even though Jim had/ has a crush on Kathy - what is this high school?-- he fucks Mary Ann gets her preganant and marries her.
Then for reasons still NOT explained he sits in the room and watches his so called wife fuck numerous men. Why he stays is till not explained.
It CANNOT be the Knife since he was allowed to walk out.
He doesn't get any witnesses... He doesn't take any pictures... And 5 will gwt you 10 that the baby will be his in an attempt to set up some sort of reconciliation.
yeeeech
DG Hear, MFG, is writing for DG Hear, MFG. It's certainly not that he doesn't care about his readers' responses, he certainly does. I know he reads each and every comment, because he forwards them to me with his comments, and none of his comments is snarky or dismissive. He cares a great deal about writing and his audience.
But he writes to tell the story as he sees it, and he cannot do otherwise. I've commented on some of his stories, but, though respectful, he goes his own way. I must say I admire DG Hear, MFG, for his honesty, his storytelling skill that is beyond question, and his integrity. He is ultimately true to himself.
And I've said it many times, but I'll say it again: it is a privilege, an honor and a blessing to be permitted to copy edit for so fine a writer.
I try and put the chapters in the categories they represent. If I don't the management often changes my category anyway. I feel that those who want to read it will find it. Chaper 3 is in Erotic couples and Chapter 4 is in Romance. Hope those who want to read it find it. All four chapters have been submitted for days now.
It's been taking 4 and 5 days for them to get posted. Hopefully Ch. 3 will post tomorrow and Ch. 4 on Wed. Thank you to all that are reading my story and especially those who are taking the time to comment. It truly is appreciated and all any writer can ask for.
DG
I see nothing wrong with DG puttin each installment in the proper category. All you need is one installment for you to click on his name to find the list of his stories in alphabetical order without regard to the category to call up the next one..
Your story is utterly fucking disgusting and perverted. How can any normal erotic writer on and erotic web site produce Non-Erotic PERVERTED dialogue like this. Were you ever a normal erotic writer or did you lose your balls along the way? How utterly stupid and pointless you are just a romantic TURD!!! I think you should just go crawl into your pink hole and fuck off. TWAT!
That last one was bad. That guy must live in a toilet. Even if the story is bad ( and I have not read it yet) nobody deserves that shit that he was spewing out. I don't understand how you authors stay here and live with this shit. Cheers. Jim
In my story Initial Public Offerings, the technical cheating only occured in the first section. Granted, there was no other sex, but the entire impetus for the story was and remained the conflict created by the cheating. I was not required to change the story from one catagory to another...nor should you have.
I don't understand the difficulties. Other multi chapter stories which involve finding other lovers don't run into this problem either.
YMMV
A good read and I'm interested in finding out what he is planning to do to the assholes that fucked his wife.
Thanks for the read.
Its really hard to care for this story seeing how a sorry, good for nothing loser your protagonist his. Its kinda like watching high school football, its okay but you dont really care who wins.
What is the revenge for? You deserve to live in a trailer by yourself.
and maybe a watcher or two. TK U MLJ LV NV
I can't wait to see what kind of revenge is in store for the cheating assholes...
He should have refused to pay his share of the last two months rent. What were they going to do, evict him?!
to read the remainder after reading chapter 1 more than a year ago.
Why can't he see Kathy before the divorce is final, but Mary Ann can be seeing Rob?
Especially where she supposedly doesn't even want the divorce?
so far, all we have is a lot of build up with no follow through.
Much Ado About Nothing.
'Cause doing the right thing is a lot more important to Kathy than to MaryAnn.
Yes, they were assholes, but they didn't take anything from him that wasn't offered. If he needs revenge, Mary-Ann should be the target. She willingly gave it up, she is the one that lied to him, betrayed him, broke her vows to him. Aside from a moral standpoint, those guys owed him nothing. Yes, they did a shitty thing, knowing she was married, but they were nobody to Jim. Mary-Ann was the one that made the choice, as his wife, to cheat and betray him. Unless they were rapists, nothing would have happened, without Mary-Ann's willingness.
and until they are cut they will be there; TK U MLJ LV NV
Why revenge on the willing men when your wife was the willing whore? Revenge on the wife makes sense, but the men merely went along with her wishes. BTB and her willing bitches will suffer their deed too.
they must die. I will never see anything wrong with killing my fellow man/woman if they start shit. We are humans, violence is in our blood, mercy is for the weak, my fellow humans male or female who start shit are not weak.
We have failed to teach the young to fear fire, the lions teeth, and fear the beast that is mankind, see school shootings the shooters had no fear....with 8 billion people it will get worse.
They had no fear to do what they did to him...8 billion - 4= sanity.
I like this story and the.direction it is taking. Mary Ann is a piece of work.
Interesting story so far. I would have moved on from Kathy as well. Don’t hem and haw. I’m not sure Jim has learned from his experience with Mary Ann. Kathy seems to be the same....
My ex Cheated on Me and I got nothing . Thank You California for being so kind
Interesting continuation. I hope the revenge will go well beyond word.
5*
BJ
Curious as to why he never involved the cops when he was held at knifepoint while his wife was getting f-cked. Should have left the hotel room and called them. Putting that guy in jail would have been the start of a decent revenge.