All Comments on 'Daddy's Little Girl'

really nice and would to see more

It seems as if you wrote this story and simply posted it without having anyone else read it or offer suggestions or edit it.

There is nothing wrong with the story line itself. But when a reader has to stop or pause to figure out what the author is trying to say or convey, then it ruins the flow of the story. Offering your story to someone to edit it and make suggestions would help solve this issue.

Good luck with your future writing!