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Rather bad from the beginning
Wolves do not attach people, never had a documented case in the US. So you started of badly and it didn't get any better. Research before you write.
ignore the one
You can ignore the one posted comment, of no wolf attacks on humans that's just false. There have been documented attacks by wolves against humans including in the U.S. in Alaska the lower states its just a matter of time.
whatever!
Whatever on those other comments. I liked your story! Please keep writing! Please make it into a romance. Let us get to know them as people.Thanks!
Harsh!
Such harsh critiques -- have you ever heard of constructive criticism? And if you are going to comment on other people's writing, yours should be perfect -- it is "attack" not "attach", and "off" not "of", anonymous #1. With that being said, I think the story needs a lot more fleshing out, it's a bit of a simple start but there are many directions it could go, many of which could be very intriguing. Good luck.
A good read - looking forward to next part..
It's sad that some people (neh TROLLS) feel the need to post negitive comments with out have the guts to post under a name.
Thanks for posting this story, and will read the next installment.
Loved this story
It is sweet and sexy and I can't wait for the next chapter.
Please Write the next one!
I loved this and cant wait for the next one...please let there be a next one :)
Loved it :3
Can't wait for chapter 2...seriously I can't wait hurry and post it XD
*****
I liked it. It had an innocent, fairytale quality to it that I found charming. A good first effort, despite a few flaws. I think you should continue.
Five, for starters.
Sweet
I'm intrigued and can't wait for more.
Nicely told
This is such a nicely told tale, that it would be a shame to leave all of your panting readers in their current state....wouldn't it???!!!! Please, chapter 2....
Nice!!!!
Like a delicious meal you satisfied me but left me wanting MORE!!
Submitted Chapter 2
Thanks for the feedback. I submitted Ch. 02!
Wooooo!
Great job! Really enjoyed this! Lily reminds me of myself and Noah is just fucking hot 😝 haha
Love it!
I love the way you write, you descriptive ability is something I strive for; it's a work in progress for me. You need to write more stories. :-)
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