Ethan's First

Softmore?

This was a reasonably decent story line, shot to shit with moronic writing. I gave up shortly after 'softmore.'

ditto

Work on your writing

Nice storyline, not so great writing.

Loved the storyline and would like to see more from it. However your writing definentally needs some improvement. Best advice I can say is to maybe get yourself a proofreader of some sort to help you? Continue this story! I like where it's going :)

good but needs improvement.

Really liked the story, but you need a proofreader.

fuck the critics

Good story man!!!!!!! tell the haters to eat shit! I'm waiting for a part 2. keep up the good work.

No one is perfect assholes! This was a good story and he should continue..

Not exactly credible

If Amber is as casual about sex as she appears from this story, she's probably a walking petri dish for STDs. Still, sounds like Rachael's going to substitute in the next round.

Editing

I'm going to get an editor on this to fix the errors (very sorry about that, I should have noticed a bunch of the easy ones).
Thanks everyone for the comments, even the negative ones are appreciated so I can improve on the next story.

18 and he's a rising junior?

Maybe the constant stutter wasn't because he was nervous.

Great

Loved it, great story, keep writing!

Awesome story!

When I clicked on this website and came across your story I knew for sure that Ethan's First is the best sex story in this website! But what would have made the story even better is if during when Ethan is sucking Amber's tits Ethan goes down and eats her juicy pussy!

stud

It sounds like this STUD would be great in a threesome with Rachael and Amber.