by Samuelx
Samuelx is a seriously ill psychopath who is in dire need of psychological help before he self-destructs. Obviously he is a juvenile / teenager who is a self-proclaimed hater of all elements of the human race.
The cut and paste, evil, and racist diatribes that Samuelx submits to Literotica.com are clear indications that he is a dangerous psychopath juvenile / teenager who is a danger to all concerned in his community.
Canada should immediately extradite Samuelx to Haiti!
Lately he has referred back to his old tricks of using different computers with different names [i.e.; Anonymous] to post positive comments about his nonsensical diatribe submissions as well as to negatively talk about people who have made negative comments about him and his people hating submissions.
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Still the same unbalanced person. You need to check into an mental health hospital and you are dangerous to the community. You are not a writer.
And I didn't see anything honestly wrong with it. In fact, his writing quality is pretty good. He was able to be personal and commucate with the audience using short and casual sentences. This would typically mess with flow, but somehow it worked. Now with that said, the substance could be better. It's under detailed and the only racial things I noticed was the infatuation with his own race and gender, which is more common than you think lol *eye roll*. I haven't read anything else from him so I'm speaking solely about this post.
Like you I love hijabs. BUT, you gave no details - none whatsoever - about a hijab, what they do for the wearer or for you, the voyeur. You did not even mention it, or did I miss the single mention? You have the makings of a real storyteller. Details make a story but so many of your stories miss this point. This time you outdid yourself - in spectacular fashion.
For Pete's sake, in a story with such a title you HAVE to give details for the many readers without a clue what a hijab is.
Conclusion: this failure completely destroyed my enjoyment of the story.
Score: 2 for trying - you really tried my patience this time, sunshine !!!!
Well written. Keep it up !! Going further into details would improve the eroticism.