All Comments on 'Never Have I Ever'

Your story was nice overall. A few typing/grammar errors here and there but nothing that really killed the story for me. I say keep it up.

I hope you continue to put out great content like this.

although an editor never hurts...

One of the most erotic stories ever. I wish I was Sammy. So hot

Write a part two!!

Love the build up, please write part two. such a lucky guy.

You're obviously a genius! I think that you shouldn't give Sammy too much confidence after this; he should be faithful to Lynn. Are you trying to go for a happy ending? Then I think that he should inadvertantly make Lynn jealous but then they end up being together. I might do a run through for grammar and spelling though; it really does take away from the story. Otherwise, it's an amazing story that kept me awake into the early hours. My favorite aspect of the story is the whole setting and tone of the whole story. I don't know of it's because I think it's realistic or just sexy but it makes me hot so keep it up please!

great story, few editing errors, but nothing major

wonderful build up, though the slap on the ass seemed a little out of character

all in all a wonderful really hot story and i REALLY hope there is a part 2 (or more?)

I agree! One of the best stories, I've read. Aside from the few grammatical mistakes, it was very enjoyable and I hope you continue this story! Thank you!

PART TWO

That was one of the greatest story's on literotica.

Looking forward to reading the second part

Brother-sister stories are always exciting, but some of them are poorly paced or lack detail, which suggests that the author has not really imagined it. This outstanding contribution avoids both pitfalls. Well done, and thank you for sharing it with us.

Very hot. This is great story but there are a few typos.

You have to continue this story, no question about it.

You should give him a go with his mother before he heads off to school. If you ever need a editor please consider me for the job.

The story may have some errors in it, but I still liked it. Keep going.

As already said not perfect but it was very readable and I want to see more in a similar vein A poor pun I know

What a great game. It was what was needed by Sam to loosen up and realize that even a nerd can get the girls to like him and his cock. A very good brother sister story a five. There were a few typos and you could use an editor but still a mighty fine story.

I loved the slow build up, the gradual rise in lust and then the reality check. But then lynn throws it all out the dorm window and becomes a mindless slut? Wtf?!

Your writing has so much potential. Please craft your stories right to the end! :)

A very good story . Would to see more in this series

Plz continue the story.

Very hot story I hope you do more like it !Keep it up and I will keep reading .Thanks a lot !!

Please continue the story very shortly

This was great. There are alot of stories that are not very believable. THIS WAS! The nerdy big cocked guy, The crazy roommate! the game getting out of controll.. Please finish the story. Sounds like a threesome is next then mayby a make over for the Sam and then get carrie in on the sex and then into his fresman year.

I REALLY ENJOYED IT AND CANT WAIT MORE!!!

Wow what a great story & yes u need to go on & finsh at the end Adrienne was standing in the doorway & said "This is not over yet!".

So u need to get on with it & lets c if it turns out to be that he gets all 3 of them one at a time would be great i think yummy yummy.

Then at the very end they have a 3 some wow HEAVEN.

You did a very nic job, Can't wait till the next chapter. Thank you for your time and effort.

i seriously doubt you know how to proofread the writing sucked do everyone a favor and delete it and do a rewrite using a good editor.

Can't wait for part 2

where is part 2

The story is great and imaginable. I just wish writer's would learn the difference between your and you're.

Typos really don't bother me as much as others. I can see past that. Looking forward to the next chapter as I enjoyed this one :-)

That was a great story, I normally vote but do not leave comments.... I wanted to see a second part to this story so I thought I would just ask in this comment. I noticed the typo's but big deal it didn't take anything away from this story. I agree with one of the comments that Sammy should go to that collage and not get to confident. GREAT JOB!!!

Love the story and Hope you add to it want to fined out about the room mate too.

great stuff keep writing ASAP

I was thrown a bit by the typos, especially the he/she thing in the first line almost ! You need to watch that because, although it's only a small thing, it IS a distraction and quickly gets annoying.

The story was very good. I especially liked the absence of the "usual" obscenities. The ending was a tad sudden but, to be fair, the quality of the rest of the tale is what made that so obvious.

You definitely should write some more. Thanks for sharing.

Outstanding story. Well written. Well sculpted.

The 5'3" 110 pound brother showed off his 8.5 to 9" long, 2.5" thick dick... you were writing a good story, you did not need to fall back on such a stupid trope... realism is a lot sexier than that. It immediately pulled me out of the story.

You show great promise, but you desperately need to use a spell check, and proof read (on your own, or get a friend to do it) your work. Most of the mistakes are small in and of themselves, but they add up to an annoyance for readers.

Please take this in a positive way; I would like to read more of your work, just not with the “distractions” of this one.

Thank you for sharing your talents.

Really enjoyed the story. Yes the typos kind of distracted, just run the next one by an editor. Hope there is a sequel, even getting Carrie involved. Thank you for sharing this.

I liked the story, it was different then the usual Brother/Sister story. I agree, a little time rereading would take out the distractions. I would like to see more stories from you

I appreciated the afection and sensitivity in the relationships.So often authors here have to write about fucking rather than making love- if you understand the distinction

To quote Adrienne, "This is not over yet!"

One of the Greatest I have ever read.

I absolutely loved this story! The way you wrote it made the characters come to life, absolutely fantastic. Thank you, and I really hope you continue this storyline, maybe with him deciding to go there and they all get an apartment together or something. And when does Carrie get involved?! She and Adrienne both wanted him it seemed like.

Great Story, love where it is heading. Really hope that you continue and give us more. I think you have already set up the next logical step by having Adrienne come into the room. Hope to see the next chapter soon, keep up the great work!

Great start. Please continue!

Great story; waiting for next chapter...

You've simply got to write another chapter! Will Adrienne get to enjoy Sammy? How about Carrie? Heck, how about Sammy having all three girls at once? Make it a "one man orgy"! Will Sammy go to college, with his sister, to "help save dad a few dollars"? Write some more! Don't keep us in suspense.

Please write another chapter. Makes me Want to go fuck my smoking hot sister.

a lovely story ,i liked nerdy brother character . There are many such real life characters including me

Good start to a hot story. Can't wait to read more. There is a few things grammatically wrong, but other than that, it was great.

we need more, next chapter please.

Talk about revenge of the nerds! Next chapter please!

great story; make another chapter asap

Your story moved along at the right pace. It was erotic and fun to read.

omg tht was so hot. Wish i had a good sister like tht

Your grammar had some problems here and there through out, it barely took away from the fabulous erotic story. It was good because it had a good pace, and it felt possible, like this could possible happen.

Now I think that the way you eneded it could lead to one of two things, either another story based on Sammy going to this college with his sis, or just a continuation of this story and the fun encounters with the room mates. both of these ideas I would read, but then again, I'm sure that you could easily enough get me to read many things. I'm going to now have to go check out some more of your work. Keep up the story telling, I;m dieing to read them.

Good read, fun story

Guess the next chapter all three girls are going to wear the poor kid out his first time.

He won't be so shy now that he knows he has something women want, but he also needs to learn to eat pussy.

Would love to see this go another chapter at least. Adrianne and Carrie need to get in on that!

Loved it. Hope to see more of them.

Loved it!

this is one of the greatest stories i have read on this site please continue if you plan it right this could be a 6 to 10 ch series i really hope you consider it

Definitelynpotential for an awesome series and a great story

he'll have a BA and she'll have a Masters. They can live together and share their place and each other with Adrienne. That could be good for ten or so chapters.

Thanks for a great story if it stays alone and thanks for a great beginning if you turn it into a series.

Been reading stories on this site for awhile now and this is the first time I've commented deff a great start! Very errotic and good story all together. Keep writing more five star chapeters to add to this and ill read anything you right. For sure 6-10 more chapters outta this begining. Seems like the natural progression would be to have him start school there and move in with his sis and the roomates...... look forward to more of this story!! Keep up the good work.q

great story, although I wish there had been more interaction with all of them, in the story it seemed that the brother had an interest in Carrie at first, then he was only interested in Adrienne when she came out of the bathroom, and then the "surprising" ending with his sister. I sure hope there's gonna be a sequal to this story, keep up the great work!

Sammy seemed to have the hots for his sister even before he went into her bedroom,

and I'm glad he got to have all three holes of his sister. Now how is she going to be able to keep her hands off of him when they go home for the christmas break.

A great story and hope to read more soon.

Thanks for the read.

great storie, should bring roomates in and add more with sister

I liked this story, although it could've used a bit more detail during the intimate scenes. Only a small critique, but never the less I enjoyed the story and hope you continue with more chapters on Sammy's adventure with his sister and her room mates. Keep up the good work!

Dont end it there. Please give us a sequel!

I'm with the last guy keep it going.

Outstanding!

keep it going let the roomates get a chance

What a hot, sweet, caring sister

keep it going

This story is SCREAMING for a follow up.

Omg! Awesome story and get those roommates in on the action

I've never commented on a story, but this one needs continuing. Please bring the other roommates in on the action! You setup a VERY hot scene and it should be continued!

and try to mean it. TK U MLJ LV NV

Like other people have said I think you should continue the story to incl ude the other room mates. Great story very well written.

Well done story, from sisters point of view.

Good job, YKN! Nice build up, with the game and all. And I loved how hot Sammy and Lynn were for each other. For my part, I hope you continue the story.

That was...incredible! a few typos here and there and a few words missing...but that was HOT!!! My suggestion? Write more stories like this!

Great story, nice to see the geeky kid nailing the hot chicks! One being his sister just makes it hotter!

I/we would like to see what else these two achieved together and with the roommates, and who knows who else.

Definatly do a sequel!

FAN-FUCKING-FUCKTASTIC

You have an amazing talent write another story. (:

PLEASE DON'T LET THIS BE THE END. THERE YOUNG THIS STORY COULD GO ON AND ON. KEEP IT CUMMING, HA HA. A FAN FOREVER MORE MORE MORE

It was a great setup and a very hot story. I'd say the story really needed some editing, words missing, or just sloppy grammar errors that detracted. Normally I get very turned off by bro/sis stuff, but this wasn't too bad.

ok, a few typo problems but no biggy. been there. i thought the set up, descriptions, dialogue, pace were all great. you tried to give it a natural development. moment that she crawled to him and start fellating him a bit abrupt but also a wonderful moment in the story. and excellent idea to move from game to bedroom. also quite pleased that (1) the sister was small breasted and (2) they moved on to anal. maybe linger on the sexual ecstasy moments more? maybe more expression of intimacy during? lately haven't read much good here; nice to find a good one for a change. will check out your other stories.

Sometimes you lose the verb tense and noun...I am not an English teacher, but he and she are pretty important...good story though with minor crap wrong..an editor would be cranking off while he/she was fixing the verbiage.

A gripping sexy story, loved the sex and the bonding.plz make it into a long serial...plzzz

Very hot......would love to hear more!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

I would love to see more, as long as it doesn't get angsty, I'll happily keep reading.

The idea of the 'never have I ever' game is simple but you make it works great.

It beguns to loosen up the brother but it's everybody who become a little crazy.

wow what a hot story i cum twice and my cock is still hard.

Insanely hot.

Freaking awesome! Yowza! Lol uuugggg makes me wish I wasn't single for once! Lol

please learn to either properly edit your stories yourself or learn to use a GOOD editor. you stupid errors ruin the flow of the story and keep readers away from the rest of your stories NO ONE WANT TO STOP AND FIGURE OUT WHAT YOU ARE TRYING TO SAY.