Never Have I Ever

Great read

Great read, it made me want to watch. Consider Adrianne eating Lynn while her brother fucks Adrianne. When the other roomate hears the groaning comes to investigate.

What an idiot...

To the critic from below "please learn to either properly edit your stories yourself or learn to use a GOOD editor. you stupid errors ruin the flow of the story and keep readers away from the rest of your stories NO ONE WANT TO".
Try sending your complaints about editing to an editor before you post them yourself! First, Capitalize, Capitalize, CAPITALIZE THE FIRST LETTER OF ANY SENTENCE! Idiot. Next, put periods where they belong... like after the word 'stories'! Lastly, when dealing with a singular, you use the plural of the verb... and although 'no one' implies a vast quantity, it is singular in nature. Thus... 'wants' is the correct verbiage. Didn't read the rest of your idiot post, so can't comment on the rest of it, which is better for you, LOL!
To YKN4949... any mistakes were not noticeable enough to detract from the story. Good job and keep writing!

Great flow, and ignore the jerks!

The problem at this sight is those folks that think their all so mighty to tear at someone's talent! Great flow, and real hot of a read! Screw the jerks that have to make a note and just crash your mood to do something else.

Sammy a lucky guy, got his sister and adrienne, though it would be interesting to see who finally gets him.

I love this awesome story

I would love to hear more about the three of them

AWESOME

i TRULY HOPE THERE IS MORE TO SAMMY'S ADVENTURE.

Wow!

I'm so fucking ready now--gonna cum hard!

HOT

Loved the game idea, but the descriptions were so good I just didn't want it to end!

Amazing

This is one of my favourite stories on this entire site. Its so nice seeing a male character who is not a arsehole and is just shy and i really like how you establish the brother/sister interaction and how Lynn does care about her brother and wants him to be happier.

never have i ever

Never have i ever enjoyed a story this much

Brilliant

One of the better stories Is there going to be a follow up

Sexxy!

A brother's dream!9F3B

Very Volcanic!

Your writing and story is nothing short of Volcanic!!!

One small but important suggestion, get a good spellchecker and grammar checker. That was the only drawback on your story. I DO WANT TO SEE MORE CHAPTERS ADDED TO THIS STORY!!! PLEASE!!!

needs a prooofreader

it is a very good story and the plot can continue for quite some time. The most important thing for any author is to find a good proofreader.

Very Compelling and Readable

Characters are believable and relatable, enjoyed it a lot.

Great story..Next Chapter..the roomates

With that monster cock, the roommates deserve a treat.

Imaginative.

You have a real talent, to my mind for coming up with the way out unusual.
Gotta read a lot more of the fruits of your imagination.

Oh, Really?

What kind of vitamins was this kid taking... what ever it is, he could pay for his college education by selling it to all the "Jocks" on campus. (Or maybe he just had a blood transfusion from "Young Frankenstein"?)

great story

that was a great story, wow, with the right amount of suspense and sex, it was truly a thrilling read

4 OUT OF 5 DUE TO ERRORS

This was a great story from start to finish, but it was riddled with small spelling errors and missing words. Unfortunately, several of these take you out of the moment as you try to deduce what the author had intended to write. If this story was given a quick editing to polish up these problems it would definitely be a 5 out 5.

Incredibly hot

Older sister incest is so dirty and sexy. Yum

great story

Very good!

I really did enjoy the story. I agree about the spelling errors and missing words though but everyone makes mistakes now and then. the story didn't just jump straight to sex like most do. I give it 5 stars! Keep up the good work!!!

The Nerds Life

What spelling, what missed words, I was so into this story I did not notice. Write Write keep on writing. EJ

Great story i really enjoyed it 5 stars from my side

please go on with your story.

your story was so hot it had me hard and leaking precum the whole time.Awesome job

Hot Story!

One of my favorites I have read on here. I liked how there was a lot of build up, and did not just jump to the sibling sex. Had me wet and throbbing the whole time. Keep it up!

marvellous

i did not stop reading from beginning to end. very exciting and innovative, as well as creative. hope to read more such sexy game actions.

really good

This was really good maybe a story like this with two sisters with the younger getting dominated and also turned into a slut afterwords but also has a cousin who is same age as sister and is taught how to be a Dom

Never Have I Ever !

This is my first comment on Literotica in years of enjoying this site. Thank you for this story, its a great mix of hot and raunchy yet also has the innocent emotional connection. Awesome and insanely erotic !

hot sis love

Damn hot juicy sis bro story and also like the way you build up story slowly.You got a great gift writing love story YKN4949..Keep up good work..

awesome

great story write more. love this

Outstanding

Very hot, well written. Loved it, thank you!

Great story

This is an awesome story. I would love to see it continued from right where it left off at.

keep it going

Please don't stop with the story here keep it going there could be so much more

Loved it

So when is the movie coming out and when are the other two girls going to get fucked.

great story

would love to read what happens next between Lynn, Adrienne, Carrie, and Sammy

Edit

Excellent story. But there were quite a few errors such as Carrie becoming Claire and missing words. Again, excellent story but please use an editor/proofreader next time

WISH

wish I'd had a sister...
so far as proof reading, yes get a 3rd party. But you can catch a lot of errors simply by reading backward. It causes you to focus on every word

Between re-reading this and re-reading 'just the six of us' (even if the brother there is a douche tard, lol) I am soooOo wishing I had a sister or four, or step sisters, or adopted sisters, or being adopted with sisters, or a neighbor with girls who treated me like their brother (..er, naughty bad brother;)

My mom the divorce queen, five husbands, and not one fucking sister. I've been robbed!! ;)

more please

I would love to read more of this

more!

do continue, please!

Be Advised!

From now on I'm taking an extra blood pressure pill before reading anymore of your creations.

Wink Wink
SliperyRox

Of BTW.... don't you dare stop
It'll be 39 lashes with a wet noodle if you do!
( you know what comes after the wet noodle.....)

More Please

Can't stop thinking about this story, you have to continue it

Very nasty hot

Very naughty and nasty, please get a nasty foursome going on with them and the rest of the floor "ladies" of the dorm.

Spelling and Word choice errors

First of all I LOVED THIS STORY and the way it was written. I am not usually the one to point out people's word or spelling errors. I think it would be great if you re-read it or have somebody correct it for you. In the beginning of the story when talking about THE DUDE you said 'I think that SHE came out of the womb with a certain social awkwardness'. There are other places in your story that also needs correcting.

loved the story

well written very descriptive extremely sexual. got my dick as hard as sammys. you have to tell what he did to adrienne

well written

love it.looking 4sum

Great

The only thing missing is he didn't eat your pussy. I would have done that first thing maybe he will eat Adrienne's

5*****

Love the way you write contemporary and vibrant conversation as opposed to dull dialogue.

Wow

This story really wowwed me. It definitely had good character development. I liked the fact it was not just a quick sex story with little in the way of plot.