by Babli5
wish I was a cucumber! Once again an erotic tale with a difference. Keep it up.
Babli,
God you have some real hot nature, desires and ability to write explosively juicy erotica.. imagining Veeni's dick while masturbating with Cucumber is too hot.
Hugely erotic..
Hugs
This one is truly hottttt!!!!!! I loved every bit of your description. Talk of carrot and stick... perhaps it should read 'carrot and cucumber' in the erotica, the way you described it. Good writing and nice themes :) You really make them short and sweet, don't you?
I like the way you write, but some terms or phrases seem a touch awkward. Perhaps you are just being creative; trying out different ways of describing the actions so they seems more descriptive.
Phrases like "my opening" seems to be distancing the action, and "my cunt stretched and expanded like rubber around it" as it correlates what is human to something inhuman again, distances action from human interaction.
Babli, you write well, slowly building the tempo till it reaches a crescendo if passion & lust. Best no words are wasted in describing the girls passion. Loved it.
Such a simple experience, but provided just the perfect amount of dialog to make worth reading.