All Comments on 'Always'

I can't wait to see where this goes!

Looking forward to more.

Good, basic beginning and set up. We were introduced to the major players and how they relate to each other. This has definite potential. I can see it going anywhere from here and I'd really like to see what you have in mind for these boys.

can't wait to see more. This has potential, even between alex and max :) I'd like to know, though, if max has staight back hair or bLack hair ;)

chapter 2 is awaited

You need to have someone review your writing prior to posting. I don't think anybody minds the odd spelling mistake or missing word, but you have a number of grammatical errors plus a sudden switch from 3rd to 1st person that just aren't acceptable.

It's a very nice start. Suggestion- type up your story on a word processing program and use autocheck for spelling and grammar mistakes before posting it. Read, re-read and read it again to get the flow down.

but the 3rd to 1st person switch got me a little confused. Which do you want it to be?

Like the story so far and you have introduced the main characters with which to work on.

Just needs more editing before posting

I like how it starts off so far. I'm intrigued to see how this story unravels. I like the characters and details! Keep going :]

very good cant wait for the next instalment

You do need an editor and spelling a grammar check in a word processing program won't do them all, I like the story, however you need to choose between first and third person.

Started at 3 so came back to the beginning. I agree you do need an editor but I like the story so can see the difference from reading the third chapter to this one. You are doing well, the story is gripping and you have a couple of interesting inter plot lines to from this one Max, Max and Alex, Leon's history, who is obviously intrigued by Cameron and why, when he has known about Cam for awhile did he never admit to it before?? Anyway onto the middle chapter lol