this seems more suited for the mind control section.
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Anonymous06/27/12
A bit different
At least it has a different slant on things sexual, but shouldn't it be in the Mind Control section? I enjoyed chapter 1 and the potential it has for succeeding chapters is wide open. I hope you will explore it.
At first I thought it took a little from the "Evil Bitch" series, then I realized you have your own spin on it. I thought it was pretty good, but this story didn't have any interaction that's considered incest so you should consider putting it in the mind control section. Besides, you have already attracted most taboo/incest readers and they will most likely be looking forward to the next one, as am I. Thanks for the story, oh and I rated it a 5 for you.
I am happy with the way things are going and would like to thank you for posting it in this section because it feels like incest will play a big role in this series and nothing bugs me more than seeing a story missing chapters because they were posted somewhere else even though a different catagory was the driving inspiration for it
I understand the concern for the category of this story, including that of the comments I deleted. (both poorly written and redundant) However, with the focus of this series and the next chapter, already written and under review, almost entirely driven by the main character's interactions with his sister, it seems felt appropriate and logical for me to write them under the category of incest/taboo.
The mind control elements, while exciting and additive, are merely that - a bonus to a story that revolves around a brother and a sister despite short tangents to other subjects/people.
Enjoy the story as I did writing it, and look for the next chapter coming soon - I always like feedback and could even look to suggestions on where reader's would like the story to go. I'll likely continue to delete commenters that fail to even glance at the criticisms of my fellow authors and readers and their much appreciated input below.
I've wished for a remote I could use on a woman! Keep going, I know you have the story in the right place. I didn't see the deleted comments obviously, but I'm sure they were empty headed as usual. Keep going, I'm going to enjoy sister getting what she deserves.
RS
This should be put in a different category since there was no incest involved. Yet. So, don't leave us hanging too long and let's see what happens with the sister and maybe more?
this is a great beginning chapter to an even greater series the ways this story can go are endless. I believe that you are an amazing writer and should continue this series. it is not only a well written and unique story but also a story with many different elements that many kinds of readers will definatly enjoy.
continue writing
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Anonymous06/30/12
No incest
But a great story that has lots of possibilities , so please continue with it. Could you tell me where you could buy on of these remotes, would love to use it on my sister lol
Great start! There is so many ways this story could go. Cant wait to read more!
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Anonymous07/02/12
Hmm...
...the makings of a good story but I must confess to disliking the remote device. For one thing, it's highly implausible - for another, it's too much like coercion for my liking - coercing victims helpless to fight back. Bit uncomfortable. Great otherwise!
...if she were *my* sister I would have turned her over my knee and spanked her ass waaaaaay before now for her bitch mouth, not to mention her hitting/pinching! Little girl needs not only a good spanking but a lesson in humility :). ...and if the story is going where I think its going after cussing him out for spanking her (and getting a subsequent spanking for *that* cussing) she probably would retreat to her room or the bathroom to get herself off ;)
Like the story so far, even if the main char is a bit of a wus/pussy; guess thats necessary for the plot development here though! Lol :)
fukkkk that was so goddam hot, I would love to have that remote to.push someone I.like in the right direction, dammmm, my cock got soooo hard, especially about his hot sister, shit, hes gonna love fucking her if he does
English
this seems more suited for the mind control section.
A bit different
At least it has a different slant on things sexual, but shouldn't it be in the Mind Control section? I enjoyed chapter 1 and the potential it has for succeeding chapters is wide open. I hope you will explore it.
I liked it
At first I thought it took a little from the "Evil Bitch" series, then I realized you have your own spin on it. I thought it was pretty good, but this story didn't have any interaction that's considered incest so you should consider putting it in the mind control section. Besides, you have already attracted most taboo/incest readers and they will most likely be looking forward to the next one, as am I. Thanks for the story, oh and I rated it a 5 for you.
nice start
I am happy with the way things are going and would like to thank you for posting it in this section because it feels like incest will play a big role in this series and nothing bugs me more than seeing a story missing chapters because they were posted somewhere else even though a different catagory was the driving inspiration for it
Thanks! And no thanks.
I understand the concern for the category of this story, including that of the comments I deleted. (both poorly written and redundant) However, with the focus of this series and the next chapter, already written and under review, almost entirely driven by the main character's interactions with his sister, it seems felt appropriate and logical for me to write them under the category of incest/taboo.
The mind control elements, while exciting and additive, are merely that - a bonus to a story that revolves around a brother and a sister despite short tangents to other subjects/people.
Enjoy the story as I did writing it, and look for the next chapter coming soon - I always like feedback and could even look to suggestions on where reader's would like the story to go. I'll likely continue to delete commenters that fail to even glance at the criticisms of my fellow authors and readers and their much appreciated input below.
Good one
I've wished for a remote I could use on a woman! Keep going, I know you have the story in the right place. I didn't see the deleted comments obviously, but I'm sure they were empty headed as usual. Keep going, I'm going to enjoy sister getting what she deserves.
RS
Great Start!
This should be put in a different category since there was no incest involved. Yet. So, don't leave us hanging too long and let's see what happens with the sister and maybe more?
Pretty Cool
this is a great beginning chapter to an even greater series the ways this story can go are endless. I believe that you are an amazing writer and should continue this series. it is not only a well written and unique story but also a story with many different elements that many kinds of readers will definatly enjoy.
continue writing
No incest
But a great story that has lots of possibilities , so please continue with it. Could you tell me where you could buy on of these remotes, would love to use it on my sister lol
Great start! There is so many ways this story could go. Cant wait to read more!
Hmm...
...the makings of a good story but I must confess to disliking the remote device. For one thing, it's highly implausible - for another, it's too much like coercion for my liking - coercing victims helpless to fight back. Bit uncomfortable. Great otherwise!
Great story. How there will be much more.
Gotta say......
...if she were *my* sister I would have turned her over my knee and spanked her ass waaaaaay before now for her bitch mouth, not to mention her hitting/pinching! Little girl needs not only a good spanking but a lesson in humility :). ...and if the story is going where I think its going after cussing him out for spanking her (and getting a subsequent spanking for *that* cussing) she probably would retreat to her room or the bathroom to get herself off ;)
Like the story so far, even if the main char is a bit of a wus/pussy; guess thats necessary for the plot development here though! Lol :)
Second time reading this!
Was browsing and saw the story again and couldn't resist! Just occurred to me, he sure could use one of those portable USB battery packs! Haha
please continue this story. i want more.
fukkk
fukkkk that was so goddam hot, I would love to have that remote to.push someone I.like in the right direction, dammmm, my cock got soooo hard, especially about his hot sister, shit, hes gonna love fucking her if he does
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