by picollamia
I think you would really benefit from an editor, there were a lot of mistakes that were quite jarring when reading the story. You also might think about the fact that everyone being so obviously stunningly beautiful can be quite cliche. However your imagination shone through and I hope you continue to write as I think you obviously do have something. Good luck for the future.
The need for editing isn't that bad, but is there nonetheless. I think if you proof it yourself after putting it down for a while, you would catch most of the little aggravaters. I'm a typical guy, revolted by the images of man-on-man sex. I've learned to allow llicense to writers and read their stuff with their mind instead of my own. But the enjoyment is and never will be there. Sooo, given your fetish, I probably will find limited entertainment in your writing. Sorry.
I am in agreement with Jon. You need the story edited. Great start
This story seems to be off to a very good start. I hope to be able to read more soon. 6 months seems like a long time between postings. Please post another chapter soon.
I must apologize to you, I accidentally only rated your story two stars when I actually intended to give it four and I'm sorry if it causes the overall star rating go down. Please know that I really enjoyed this and I hope to read more of it in the future! Keep up the good work and keep at it!
for the first page,but seeing as how it has been well over a year since this was posted,i guess the rest is not coming,,,such a shame,,a good beginning,,,why do people start something they wont finish,,,such a waste,,,,,
Like yourself I love a great long romance book, it has so much potential it would be a waste to not keep going with it... Please please please continue. I so look forward to reading what happens between katarina and Cade.
You have ensnared my interest and would love to know how it continues.