From the brief note in the Index I thought your story might be worth reading.
Not So!!!
First line - "I pull my still hard cock out of your cumm filled pussy ..."!!
That idiotic word - 'you'!
It is totally ridiculous trying to make out that the Reader is/was a participant in your story.
The Reader knows that is/was not so and therefore you have immediately blown every vestige of believability.
And without believability your story is a complete waste of you time and the time of all those mugs you expected to read it.
Sorry, from a promising start (the Index) your story is not even worth one star!!
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What a damn shame!!!
From the brief note in the Index I thought your story might be worth reading.
Not So!!!
First line - "I pull my still hard cock out of your cumm filled pussy ..."!!
That idiotic word - 'you'!
It is totally ridiculous trying to make out that the Reader is/was a participant in your story.
The Reader knows that is/was not so and therefore you have immediately blown every vestige of believability.
And without believability your story is a complete waste of you time and the time of all those mugs you expected to read it.
Sorry, from a promising start (the Index) your story is not even worth one star!!
Your first 2 chapters are VERY H O T - it got me so aroused; I had to stop and take care of things !!
Please write more chapters about Vicky and Patrick; Sisters talk and this will maybe bring his wife into the action !! Thank you.
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