The New Neighbors

Idea was good

but execution was bad. Once Kate had sex with one of the suspects the case was down the toilet.

I Agree With The First Comment

However it was still an interesting story. Question is, how bad did Frannie get fucked in the divorce?

Just curious

HA

lol, this was pretty good

even the black weren't to bad in this one........ 4*'s

solotoro

Is having sex considered entrapment in this case? The crime was salve trading. The sex was not part of the crime and is not illegal in itself. You could well be right (probably are) but I am curious how the law works here. If this was a prostitution sting I could understand that being entrapment. For the story itself, the idea was interesting, but needed a lot more work to make it into something more than cheap flash story. Still on some level worth reading.

So the money he paid to have his whore of a wife sold to slavers was just going to be ignored, so conspiracy to abet a kidnapping and hiring a contract killer is not illegal??????? I would think that divorce was the least of his worries about that time.

no chance

Not a very realistic tale. surely the husband would have been charged with some kind of trafficing crime for tryin to get her sold off. the slut would get everything in a divorce after he went to prison . SO SHE cheats and gets PAID to boot. not very well thought out plot but a great story idea. 3*,,keep tryin and watch out for the details,,that is what makes a great story

One point to the commenter

Tom called Nico that is entrapment. Don't know how that would play out. Just thought I would point it out. I gave this ****

to 1Thinkingman

That makes more sense - thanks. I was responding to a comment that said something like once Kate had sex charges would not stick. That one is not so clear to me.

idiots

the people making the comments and the author.

I don't really care ...

if the plot is sewn up nice and tight ... it was such a good twist I'll more than provide artistic license to the author!

Good job and thanks for the ready

hmmm, BBCs gotta be thugs, huh?

I was disappointed at the use of the stereotype of black "thug". And, really, who brings a "thug" back to their home?

Thanks for the entertainment, keep the stories coming.

Gotta go with winterfox

A bit too many holes for 'suspension of disbelief' but it WAS an engaging story. Without Dr. Hubby being charged, the 'sex slavery' trial loses umph!

Just A Fun****

Ass story thanks for sharing this crazy funny story. I am still shaking my head.

If Frannie was willing to legally rape Jerry if he didn't let her

fuck and fuck him over with her BBC, what is she willing to do to him now? And "Kate"... is she worth dating? Isn't she technically a prostitute?

I missed this one the first time

Like your other stories, this was a creative take on a standard LW formula. Like your other stories, it required a great deal of suspension of disbelief. However, I was annoyed with some things which made no sense. Hubby hired a guy to get rid of his cheating wife-law enforcement has him dead to rights on a criminal charge. Why is he let go? Why would Nico tell the hubbies his plans for the wives at the scene of the abduction? Why did the undercover couple wait so long to arrange the discovery of the affair (presumably the undercover she-cop wouldn't want to keep fucking the scum-bag for weeks/months if it was not necessary)? How was it that Nico was where the hubby's were when they got together? If his business was white slavery, why would Nico involve the husbands at all (okay, the money, but only $5000 per head, for a lot of potential legal exposure in the event a hubby went to the cops in a fit of regret and guilt)?
I get that the author was trying to spin an original yarn, using popular LW convensions and having some fun with them, and I give credit for the perplexing twist. I don't mind suspending disbelief (accepting that the wife would behave this selfishly disrespectfully and cruelly is a big suspension, and that she would then want to reconcile with hubby once the affair had run its course, and that she would think hubby would accept that, is an even bigger one), but I need some peg of reality on which to hang my hat, or else the story gets regulated to the 'cute, but forgettable' category.
I do hope for more submissions from the author, though, as his is an original voice.

Wow!

I'd like to say "Bitches be crazy", but I'm not sure who was crazier - the wife who thought she could pull that shit on her husband or the husband who wanted to send her ass to a South American whore house. I would like to see an "alternate ending"
where the FBI wasn't involved, the neighbors were married and the two husbands DID sell their wives and have the black guys buried. Follow their demise, follow the wives lives in the whore house and then follow the guilt ridden husbands with all their assets.
YEE HAW!

I'm A believer lol

The Monkey's had a great song didn't they?

It coulda, woulda, shoula been -if life were fair - the bitch would get what she deserved for doing and threatening to do what she did -

Nice idea and good execution - where are you??

Such a good twist

Great story, great imagination and yet feasible.
Thank you and also great name "The End Begins"

Name confusion...but good story

The confusion over the name of his wife at the start got to me. How did Kate suddenly go from the neighbor's wife to his then back again?
Other than that it was a pretty good story. Would have been better if the cheating slut of a wife had been punished though.

kate = skankiest agent ever

Seriously, what the gross.

Man there was a lot of shit packed into one page

I think you threw every cliche there was into the story

Confused the fuck outta me. had to read it 3 times before I caught it all while laughing.

Well done, a great laugh.