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My Little Harem Ch. 03

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by Anonymous07/02/12

Nice

Nice development, the story is flushing out. Big thumbs up for added powers and the discovery that he is in fact strong than this opponents. So far I have counted four powers: mind control, telekinesis, self healing, and simulateous orgasms.

Being this is an erotic story, I hope to see more growth in terms of the characters sexual powers. Keep it up and thanks for the quick update.

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by C_frommn07/03/12

Chapters

The story is alot of Fun men-in-Black and everything but could'nt you make the Chapters Longer.

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by Anonymous07/03/12

if you might

I like the plot line very much, but would add that a slower paced, longer more robust chapter should be a goal. That said, better now than I could do!

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by Anonymous07/03/12

Connection

I like this story. It's not wholly original, but you've put your own spin on it. Also, the 'Three Laws'? I like them, and especially love the fact that you gave credit to another story (which I have read as well). Nice job.

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by Anonymous07/03/12

keep it going

This one wasn't so kind of carefree as the others, I'm curious where you're going to take this but I'm hoping it's not somewhere dark.

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by Anonymous07/04/12

Nice continuation

The story is moving along very nicely, maybe have the next chapter include perhaps a HOT MILF, say a friend of Meghen's, who has a 22yr old daughter who goes to nursing school, and have our hero turn them both, but at different times.

Mother is turned say when she meets Meghen at Meghen's house for a talk of how her daughter is doing, schoolwise, and our hero shows and voila, another slave to join "his little harem"

Just a thought, keep it coming!!

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by Anonymous08/09/12

Compliment

Very good story so far, can't wait to see more.

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by Anonymous10/29/12

great

Keep on writing

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