Out Of The Mouths Of Drunks

Thank you

I enjoyed reading your story. Thank you.

in booze the lies come out

enjoyed this story very much as it shows action have reactions. Most cheaters don't think about their actions and how they affect others. Too all the cheaters grow up

In vino veritas

“in wine [there is the] truth"

pity that he died

Bill shoulld die !

Sandra goes to hell !!

2*

This will appeal to your target audience

an unhappy story about unhappy people.

Mostly it was unpleasant. Not bad writing, but not a great way to start the day, either.

Why do you Brits

Always kill off the hero and let Llow the bad guys to win?

Good read

Thanks and keep writing.

For fucks sake, you turned someone elses story into something where the bitches husband dies? The bitch should have died and he went on to have a happy life.

Technical quality: You could have used a few more contractions in your dialogue. I do the same thing and it reads slightly off. That was the thing I noticed the most, so good job.

Plot: Straightforward arc. Everything was set up well, even if a bit short

Emotive quality: This is where it started slipping and the flaw lies twixt the technical skill and the emotive quality. We were introduced to the husband Steve very briefly. So briefly that I barely cared about him, or frankly any of the characters. Since I never knew these people, there was little connection. It should have been longer.

Versimilitude: I can see this happening. I believed everything here so there was never a 'huh?' moment.

It's a sad tale but effective, if a bit short.

Reasonable flash story

Fairly well-written, but disappointing that Steve is portrayed as a weakling/wimp. Most 45 year old men won't die from the shock of learning about their wives' infidelities. Instead of anger, he just cries, suffers a breakdown, does not even seem to want a separation, then gives up the ghost and dies. Sorry about the stereotyping, "mate," but we seem to see a lot of weak male characters in stories written by UK authors. If this exemplifies England's current outlook, I doubt She would be able to win the Falklands War if it were to occur today. Three stars.

great story

but I agree with Rephil, why does the husband have to die? *****

Reasonable flash story

Fairly well-written, but disappointing that Steve is portrayed as a weakling/wimp. Most 45 year old men won't die from the shock of learning about their wives' infidelities. Instead of anger, he just cries, suffers a breakdown, does not even seem to want a separation, then gives up the ghost and dies. Sorry about the stereotyping, "mate," but we seem to see a lot of weak male characters in stories written by UK authors. If this exemplifies England's current outlook, I doubt She would be able to win the Falklands War if it were to occur today. Three stars.

Hmm...death by a broken heart? Possible I guess. As for the "real" story? I wonder why some people ever get married, this woman in this story and the woman in the "real" story are examples of people who should not be married. American or English it doesn't matter. Anyway, curious story.

Interesting

Disappointed in the outcome but only for the sake of the victim taking the brunt of the pain/punishment. But heck, that happens in real life.

I am most disappointed in the fact that there is a site available for cheaters to proudly proclaim their "victories"

Interesting little flash story. I wonder if the Internet site where cheating wives brag to their fellow sluts is a sign of the serious degradation of society in general. I suppose that is a gross generalization, as the acts of a few do not reflect society as a whole, but the Internet certainly has exposed some of our seamier denizens.

We live in a society

were there is little consequence to the actions of the populous. This story illustrates the extreme effect of cheating on a spouse. It even carried over into the commentary. Unfortunately realistic, had he survived she would have been rewarded by society through the laws of divorce. Or he would have kept her and the reward would have been even more immediate. Only his death brings out the completely ugly truth that is cheating. Moreover, the only recourse of moral society the ostracism of the cheater, and the sad truth is she'll bounce back she will rationalize her actions and go with her life. That is if the sleeping pills don't work. Depressing story I gave this ***** but would ask the author not to write a story like this again. Once is enough.

Sad tale with no winners

The wife appears to be the star of the story can't really all her a heroine because of her heinous, cruel, selfish act. I personally don't think she should get a pass because she was drunk when she gave her outburst. The author tells us that a near similar outburst happened in real life and if liquor was involved still no reason for a pass. In the story the wife was lucid enough to not slur her words, express complete sentences and thoughts, brag about her behavior and add a severe mental insult to her own marriage directed at her hapless husband. I would bet that the sex with Bill was really not all that great but what was great was the wickedness of it, the reality of deceiving their spouses regularly, and the false pride of getting away with something so easily that so wrong in so many ways. The ending could be have been more decisive like the "pill bottle slipped from her grasp as life left her body, her body lieing in her marital bed."

What a depressing story. I found it stretched my suspension of disbelief a lot. One, the drunk wife oh so happily spilling everything, and not even a single neuron firing in her brain, saying "uh oh, don't say that". She may be drunk, yes, but that doesn't make you say stuff you'd never say in the first place, and in SUCH a happy voice!

Two, the husband's reaction afterwards. Where is his anger? He instantly falls into depression, sobs his heart out, and when he and his cheating wife talk, he is oh so polite, and practically begging her to explain everything. He's a mildmannered milquetoast doormat.

And the wife? She doesn't think much of her husband, if at all. Here are some choice snippets:

"Oh, no, Steve! You are not a cuckold. Not really. I don't like to think of what I was doing was making you into a cuckold.

And you are not a wimp. I just needed something."

She doesn't like to think of it as cheating, and making him a cuckold. Wait, WHAT? Is this some kind of Clinton defense? I don't think it's cheating, so it's not?

"Steve, the affair with Bill has been going on for about six months, every Thursday. We never made love here or at Bill's place, for what it's worth. I wouldn't have felt right to do that to you.

So...she says making love.IE she loves Bill. It wouldn't have felt right at their houses? And the cheating did?

"I don't think you need an STD test, but if your want one, it wouldn't hurt, as it would put your mind at rest. And I have never stopped loving you. Please, please know that. And there have been no other lovers, until I hooked up with Bill. And the twins? Please don't worry. They are definitely yours."

She doesn't THINK he needs one? And she's only saying this to put his mind at rest? How considerate of her. Never stopped loving him? Lie. No other lovers? How can he know that, she's been lying her ass off. The twins definitely his? Better do some paternity testing, it "would put his mind at rest".

What irritates me more than what she says, is the TONE in which she says it. The callous, insensitive way she put things. She did not care at all how hurtful her words were (just like when she was drunk!).

Although there IS an aftermath/epilogue of sorts, there is a LOT missing that I had wanted to know.

Apparently, Bill got off scotfree. He's still married despite his cheating. He's not even thrown out of the house, he only has to move into the guestroom. As for his guilt? Since he isn't punished much, his guilt over cheating will fade away in no time. His friend dying? Again, not much guilt, Bill must not have considered Steve a good friend, since he was banging his wife! No, Bill got off scotfree.

Sandra? Did she commit suicide? Or not? That last paragraph was all perhaps and maybes. Maybe she didn't do it, the kids will forgive her eventually (she's still their mom), and she lives happily ever after.

You know what? This is a terribly depressing story.

Dude, you didn't have to kill off the poor husband! How sad :-(

Deus ex machina

A story (not terribly original, except for the weird wine) with some potential for development is degraded into a flash morality tale by using a very unlikely and unanticipated problem! Hubby's death is MOSTLY (like 95-98%) due to genetics or bad life-style choices (probably former) - very MINOR contribution of Sweetie's action and his subsequent over-reaction! Was she faultless, of course not. She screwed up by taking a lover, by choosing Hubby's friend, by getting drunk, by verbal diarrhea...BUT, what she screwed up was the family relationship (including twins)! His DEATH was an unfortunate coincidence for which she had almost no fault! He was likely to infarct well within the year, and MAY WELL have had the BEST chance of surviving by already being under observation in a hospital! (in other words, a case can be made that Sweetie inadvertantly provided Hubby with his best survival chance - fate just had it in for him!)

Good story but a real downer

I noticed that FD45 pointed out that we never really get the chance to know Steve. He has the brief emotional confrontation with Sandra the morning after the party but that's about it. I realized that the author treats Steve the same way that Sandra did. He's disposable as a husband and as a character.

Mousse9 gives a good summary of Sandra's callous and insensitive treatment of her husband. Steve IS a lousy lover, a cuckold, a wimp, and she really hadn't given any thought to diseases. Sandra gets to her sister's house and does she break down over the situation? Nope, she discusses it like she dinged her car's fender. At the end, Sandra is selfishly thinking of suicide. Poor her, everyone is angry with her for cheating on Steve and leaving him to die. She is a cold bitch and deserves no sympathy.

I also agree that Bill deserved to have his ass kicked a lot more. He was Steve's best friend and he was fucking his wife. Traitors deserve an extra ration of shit.

For a short story, it develops the characters and the situation as well as they need to be. There really is no attempt at a resolution. A drunk shoots her mouth off and destroys her life. The reader is left to contemplate the aftermath.

Well written flash story

but, truly depressing... Though in the loving wife category most of the stories are depressing....

He dies, she can't live with herself and takes some pills.

What's wrong with that?
If he hadn't died I think he was wimpy enough to take her back. I prefer it this way.

good story,you are getting better

sad ending, but life has plenty of sad ending, it could throw a brick our way any time..

Thanks***

For sharing.

about the Husband SHUT DOWN thing

Given that the author is from the IK this is NOT bad. I don't really have a problem with the husband having a complete breakdown like we see in the story but in order to make that more acceptable or believable in the story... We need to find out more information about Steven.... but we dont get that chance.

It's obvious that the wife's attenmpt to reassure him had a very serious negative impact upon Steve and made his condition even worse. But because we don't know anything about him as a person it looks like this offers simply doing the WEAK wimpy from another British author type of thing.

I don't think that's what this author was driving at . In other words if we knew more about Steve and the type of person he was and how he reacted and saw the world THEN his shut down reaction from his wife's callous unfeeling cruel comments would make a lot more sense.

Better than usual from this author but still...

...it feels incomplete as others have said. But to FD 45 will you get it right just once?-the word is verisimilitude- probably because it it rooted in veritable, not versus.

if "in wine there is truth" was true

then when you went to court to testify they would get you drunk just before you took the witness stand.

Only in the UK, I s'pose.

Because as a story, that sucked ass. Alcohol is only liquid courage and no one is so drunk that they have a conversation without knowing what they are saying. If they are that drunk, then having a conversation is damn near impossible.

For those who say "blackouts", true, but those are the exception not the rule and even then, they stl can't talk properly.

So, while the wife may have been inebriated, she would have known exactly what she was saying and if she had given up that much information then it was because she was divorcing her useless wimp of a husband and getting ready to fuck him over in court.

Interesting Story

Cannot say that I liked it in one way but it was well written if a bit brief. Nevertheless, it was well done and it did evoke emotions, which is the sign of a good story.

wow

really you have to be the best author on this page. how erotic was this story! unbelievable. the only one liking this story is maybe a necrophiliac

IN VINO VERITAS

and also the making if cheaters, TK U MLJ LV NV

The Second Chance is better as the death and deep depression are!!!!!!!!!

I am very angry with such Consequence Stories where there is not any positive steps after the betrayel. I wrote several times, it would be good to practice life managment in the High school and the sexual knowledge should take in earlier ages in the school. To learn to manage family conflict,to learn conflict manegment to avoid deep depression as there was in this story. I LIKE EVERY STORY WHERE THE BETRAYED HUSBANDS CHANGE THE CHEATING WIVES TO NEW SECOND CHANCE WOMEN!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! The best are the Revenge stories.
I do not know better example as this guy from North Carolina who was brave and got a Second Chance. Look at from You Tube:
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=bIvJms3wlaY
H is writting to his You Tube video (I showed and I will show his video in my many many past and future comments):
"I was married to an American bitch for 18 years. She got away with fraud and turned my oldest daughter against me. Going through divorce in my mid 40's I decided to look for love in a country that was family oriented. I married a beautiful 18 yr old Filipina and now I feel young again and in love!!!"
They have a common beautiful daughter!

BTW 5 stars for my emotional reaction

cpte wrote a 5 stars comment for StangStar06's story "Hindsite" 03/30/12
"SS06 this fine story did have a realistic element to it. A decade ago some university/goverment stat study found females age 35+ in North America had a higher chance of being on a hijacked airplane then finding a male mate in a relationship that would last a decade."
I think to find a Second Chance may be the best Romantic Revenge after 18-20-25 years marriage with the statistical likelyhood!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Why pretend to be American?

Adopting such Americanisms as "EMTs", "neighbors", "block party" et cetera seems a mite redundant: this story could have been set anywhere.

Not really pleased

Thanks for taking a shot and all, but this story didn't really do much for me. While you inspiration may or may not have basis in face, the story was not credible to me. While I can understand a wife cheating for excitement and pleasure (especially if the marriage has gone stale and hubby is not particulary gifted in the lovemaking department-a new screw partner will always have an initial advantage over 'old faithful'), and also understand a husband sinking to depths of dispair as in this story, I just can't imagine a wife saying what this wife says at a neighborhood party. Drunks say and do the damnedest things, but something so contrary to self-interest? Something so stupid, detailed and so guaranteed to fuck up her marriage? Seems that it would be very unlikely. And if those sentiments were true? Clearly no basis for a continuing marriage after that public disclosure. I really never felt much for the characters. I guess I saw some of the wife's grief as the fallout ensued. But, most of the characters were cardboard cut-outs. I get that it was something of a flash-story: exploring the immediate fallout of a damning, drunken confession. But, it just seemed to be missing....something. Kudos for driving the story home with dialogue-that's difficult to do.
I gave it a 4, but wrestled with giving it a 3.

She was too involved in her owh self pity to worry about her husband.

She should have at least sent Molly over to check on him.

good job

that was great

Wow

Very intense tale. No revenge. Everyone loses.
Does that cheating website really exist? If it does, all who brag on it should die in intense pain.

OMFG!Life is never so true like this...

I saw exactly that scene last week.A drunk wife of a friend because of a (stupid) discussion: "You are not like XXX!"
Boy, the husband got mad, she got sober in SECONDS when she realized she had screwed up big time.

the wife broke down, but he is divorcing her.

Damn that home made wine

A loose tongue can certainly fuck up a relationship. Her biggest slip-up was telling her husband that he wasn't any good in bed.

He probably could have gotten over her cheating, and just dumped her ass, but her telling him he wasn't man enough to satisfy her killed him.

Thanks for the read.

much better than your first submission

excellent progress

I enjoyed it.

Very gripping, captivating story. Sucks that there's no happy ending for anyone, but I like that not all stories end the same way. Keeps this genre worth reading. 5*

and then the cunt

gives him sloppy seconds - somehow i dont think she and hubby will end up in the same place even after she fucking kills her skank ass. you did a good job making her one of the most revolting women i have ever read about, other than an x-wife i have.

Brit cuckolds

Have you noticed how many of the best, and this is one, cuckold stories are written by Brits? Others can write and sometimes are good but they just dont quite have the realism of a Brits story.
I guess its because so many Brit husbands once they get married dont try any more. Football and beer rate way above keeping the wife happy in bed. Also from my swimming pool research and on holiday, Brit men on average have fairly small cocks and so arent that good at it anyway.Consequently our women are a bit sex mad. I know my darling wife has never been satisfied by my weak efforts in bed and has had the benefit of quite a few biguns. Usually foreign or even in one case in Africa.
So well done Matt keep it up (just wish I could lol)

MMMMMMM ???????

Well that is such a good story, not what I was expecting to find on here but a good read, loved the twist in the tail..

betrayal

gorged on jizz, he opened his cornhole for business, betrayed!

"Slap the divource papers on her .... "

.... that is what you do with a cheating, whore wife!!

Wow!

I don't know why but I saved this one. It's nice to see the other side of the coin once in awhile. Nicely done.

very nicely done

I've seen several cuckold stories where the husband does not take it lying down, but this is very original, and really well done. The ending, with the tramp wife thinking of suicide is perfect. Like she doesn't even stop to think of what it would do to her daughters.