All Comments on 'Better Ch. 01'

Get an EDITOR!!!

To the Anonymous commenter:

Since you claim to have a much more superior talent for writing and editing, I'd love to have your specific feedback in which my writing falls short and how it can be improved.

Too bad anonymous can't be specific. I've found no problem and am looking forward to reading Chapter 2. From what I've read, it appears that its going to be much hotter.

is that anonymous commentator talking about?

He--or she--apparently couldn't come up with anything specific.

So I give it a 5

........to what has the makings of a great series !