It's Complicated Ch. 02

Nice story and the interaction between River and her "man" is very well done. The uncomfortable feeling of many family members is nicely covered as two former relatives explore their feelings toward each other.

THE RIVER FLOWS

with all the tributaries adding to the volume, TK U MLJ LV NV

Bravo! Waiting for Ch. 03

C'mon people! Sure, some of the errors can be mildly distracting, but this is a great and well told story.

@MSTarot - Good stuff, and I like your attitude in addressing the naysayers. If I wasn't such a chicken chit, I'd off my arse, finish some of my own stories and post them, but you're actually doing it and doing it well. Bravo! I really appreciate your style in slowly unfolding small details about the characters you create, e.g., "old scrubs" as a teaser toward learning your leading man is an E.M.T. This makes for great, engaging and thoughtful reading -- draws me in to your story as a reader and makes them that much more evocative. I love it.

Again, maybe if I got off my arse, I'd volunteer to be your editor (albeit unworthy to be one), as I'd at least get an earlier read of your stories. ;)

Chapter 3 is coming

Sorry, I have been meaning to get back to this one and two others but I decided that I could do better to expand my reader if I posted a few contest stories. It's worked fairly well.

My winter holiday story is been done for the better part of a year as it's the first one I wrote. So between now and Christmas I should have the time to catch up on some of my stories that need a part two or three.

how many ways can one say that one liked it.

more please

please extend this. it needs to be longer. or at least i really want it to be a lot longer.

How are Jeff and Jack dealing with their relationship?

Great Story!

Perfect!

Loved it.

Hated the violence

Instead of exploring in any realistic manner the problem of the rejected boyfriend, this story explodes in a series of cliches stolen from bad TV. Cars ramming cars and a good guy who settles things by firing a handgun in the vicinity of bystanders are stock items brought in when a writer can't think of something more original. The mindless violence ruined an otherwise interesting exploration of an unusual relationship. Falling in love with an aunt is creative. Inserting a violent scene which doesn't advance the storyline is not.

@Anonymous

Ironically, the violence you hated was based on a true story. Maybe you should check yourself.

to: anon- hated the violence

Your world view is skewed. Grow up.Violence happens; "denial ain't just a river in Egypt." I challenge your assurtion; I found the story quite real. Your self defined liberal world never existed and never will. You balk because you do not have the guts to meet truth; YOUR imagined world is NEVER how it really works. Yeah, right, you pompous arse. Nothing you say will ever matter. The writer described his world. You don't like it - then piss off and shut the fuck up. Publish your site so we can judge your truth. You won't; you have nothing but your better than thou opinion. All the other readers despise you for your stupidity. Be gone.

The only . . .!!!

The only problem with signing your comment as Anonymous is that you piss and moan about the story without having the balls to leave yourself open to scorn from other readers. Actually I think MSTarot did a great job and if you don't like it go read some other writers stuff and diss them !!!