by JPMattock
this looks like being a good tale. I noticed in your bio about perhaps adding erotic tales later, fine if you do fine if you dont as long as you keep a story. A good story can stand on its own even if you take any sex scene out (nice though they are). You are shaping up to be a fine writer.
There's going to be a bit of a delay on the next chapter I'm abit swamped at the moment but bare with me it will be on here sometime this month if all goes to plan.