by FinalStand
I am really enjoying how you had Craig & Jamie together then added Emily into their fold.
I think we need to get Emily learning to be with Craig under guidance from Jamie with a nice and slow build up!
Well written, sexy, and believable. I don't see how anyone could label this "bad", unless they maybe have a problem with girl/girl content. More fool they.
cliché = a phrase or opinion that is overused and betrays a lack of original thought.
clique = a small group of people, with shared interests or other features in common, who spend time together and do not readily allow others to join them.
Man, I look at these older stories where I did my own editing and cringe. I can't express this enough for authors - get a good editor and treat them like gold. They are worth it.
I have to say, somewhere in between here and LNH, you certainly transformed into something incredible... be it a relationship w/ a killer editor, or some serious soul searching/near traumatic experience... I'm glad you have a frame of mind that ensures you roll w/ the punches and are obviously becoming very focused on creating something that expresses everything you've been through!
Reality: You're the best in the business.
Great. "nice" wins again. Maybe they can all go to the same college and share an apartment. Maybe Jamie and Emily can be Prom King and Queen. LOL
What an idiot Craig is. Jamie used him to get Emily who doesn’t want a bar of him. What’s to stop Jamie getting her way now and freezing dumbass Craig out of the scene altogether?
Nothing, that’s what. The only one laughing here is cunt Jamie.
Craig has possibly fucked himself over, the idiot!
Scores 2/5 so disappointed thus far.
This tale better pick up speed pronto.