All Comments on 'New Life, Here We Come Ch. 03'

The writing definitely needs improvement (a really good editor, perhaps?) but for all its faults, it somehow kept my interest. Keep trying, but keep improving. Try to be a little less fantastic, and flesh out your characters a bit more. Look forward to seeing more.

Nice to see you doing 3 stories in such short time. Keep going.

i think you need an editor whens the guy action getting started.?

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