....does your story entice and tease, Susan, but I am loving the build up. I can tell when the time finally comes where they consummate their incestuous love it will be utterly fantastic. On that note though, I did want to inform you of a couple small spelling errors I noticed pop up a few times. It is fellatio and cunninglingus, not felacio and culinguis. If you are taking a little artistic license though, that is understandable. Still another five star story that will have me coming back for the next installment.
It is spelled cunnilingus. The misspellings surprised me too.
Pity the following chapter(s?) won't meet the contest deadline, but I'm still looking forward to them, since the title promises that Mom will strip, may too late for the contest but in time for Nude Day, July 14th.
Artistic license and all that, but it requires an enormous stretch of the imagination to believe that Jason would keep a folder with paper copies of his stories under his mattress. Of course, he could have been hoping all along that Mom would eventually discover them, which would have given the story a different slant - also interesting.
But it's your story.
Of course they will. This is Literotica, after all. But will Doomsday get here first? Will any of us live to see them consumate what we all know they both want? Boredom is beginning to set in, and you know what that does to readership.
The building sexual tension in this story is so enticing, Susan. I have been quiet up to now, but the inevitable sexual eruption has me voicing my thoughts. So many stories don't allow for the delicious subtleties to manifest into something truly powerful, but your story does..
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Enticing
You are leading us on ... lol. Ms Parker you giving us little installments that oh too slowly drive us wild with anticipation is soo very delicious!
More and more and more....
....does your story entice and tease, Susan, but I am loving the build up. I can tell when the time finally comes where they consummate their incestuous love it will be utterly fantastic. On that note though, I did want to inform you of a couple small spelling errors I noticed pop up a few times. It is fellatio and cunninglingus, not felacio and culinguis. If you are taking a little artistic license though, that is understandable. Still another five star story that will have me coming back for the next installment.
Ah, well . . .
It is spelled cunnilingus. The misspellings surprised me too.
Pity the following chapter(s?) won't meet the contest deadline, but I'm still looking forward to them, since the title promises that Mom will strip, may too late for the contest but in time for Nude Day, July 14th.
Artistic license and all that, but it requires an enormous stretch of the imagination to believe that Jason would keep a folder with paper copies of his stories under his mattress. Of course, he could have been hoping all along that Mom would eventually discover them, which would have given the story a different slant - also interesting.
But it's your story.
will they?
Of course they will. This is Literotica, after all. But will Doomsday get here first? Will any of us live to see them consumate what we all know they both want? Boredom is beginning to set in, and you know what that does to readership.
What hasn't been said already
So I'll just rate each chapter, and comment where necessary
Quiet before..
The building sexual tension in this story is so enticing, Susan. I have been quiet up to now, but the inevitable sexual eruption has me voicing my thoughts. So many stories don't allow for the delicious subtleties to manifest into something truly powerful, but your story does..
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