Reminded me of my first time with my Dad, but I used the excuse of needing him to put suntan lotion on me. He took me right there on the lounge chair. We had a slight issue with a small blood stain, but must have hidden it well because my Mom never mentioned it.
Tis story was so hot I got wet reading it! When i finished i had to go masturbate and think about my daddy! Can't wait for more stories just as sexy as this one!
If you hadn't gotten lost on the POV at the beginning, I bet you would have gotten a higher rating:
"It was so wrong of me to think of my little girl in the way I have been lately. She's grown up so beautifully, it's impossible not to notice her. Her long brown hair that she left naturally wavy around the curves of her incredibly perky breasts; HE guessed a C cup."
It just goes on, out of first person, for a bit after that.
You're already jumping from POV to POV, which in itself can be hard to follow. (Though you did pretty well.) Throwing a third person POV in there for a paragraph or two....not good.
Any way, this was one of my favorite kinds of stories. Maybe if you were a bit more careful the next time around.
Don't worry about the nit-picker. Excellent story, hope it continues!
It was similar to my dad and I. Our first time was after swimming also.
A beautiful story, beautifully written. Many thanks.
I've been coming to this site for over a decade now. I've seen more than my fair share of incest stories (written a few, too, for that matter). I keep seeing the same plot lines over and over again- I could probably number them as a reference guide, y'know?
The points about POV are valid. As a writer, the LEAST you could do is warn us when the POV is going to change. Like so:
I saw her lying there on the pool lounger, taking in the sun........
As I lay out in the bright, warm sun, I closed my eyes. It was quiet, but I could still tell that Daddy was watching me....
One of the most important things that a writer should NEVER do is confuse the audience. The author should want to avoid that like the plague. Confusion = pass. By the same token, the author should do everything he can to make his story stand out as something unique. You, I'm sad to say, did neither of those things. I, as a reader, shouldn't have to decipher how the story is supposed to be read while pushing myself to slog through it on the long-shot hope that you MIGHT have something new in there.
I love reading incest stories. So hot and yet so wrong in the real world. Not going to lie, fully aroused here. The story was nicely written and I was able to follow it all without any trouble
What about the puppy?
I pushed in deep and felt resistance, surprising me.
"Kitten, are you a virgin?"
The hymen is a membrane that surrounds or partially covers the external vaginal opening. You can read the whole bit here: http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Hymen
I figure you being a female, you would know something about virginity. Epic fail!
I really liked your story, though I wish there was more.
Thank you ! It got me very horny and I loved reading it ! I hope you continue to do more. Im a fan xx
This is one of the best stories I have ever read on this site....
Look forward to reading more...
Wild, sexy and hotter than hell kitten.
Wish my daddy were nut deep in me. I'd love to fill him push deep in my pussy and cum hard.
I wish, I wish, I wish that I could find a daddy to do that to me.... Great story..
WOW that was an awesome well written story. I enjoyed reading every word of it. I gave you five stars.
It was sweet, don't worry so much about the complainer's it was a cute story. And for the idiot who called the people here sick, get out of this section you worthless hypocrite. Nobody asked for your ignorant ass opinion. Why the fuck are you even here in the first place.
Man I wish my daddy was like that but we have gotten close. But damn I wish for that daddy.
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Anonymous below comment i wish i were your daddy
A fantastic, hot erotic story. I loved how you told the tale from both points of view. Cannot wait to read more!
she wont need a puppy in a few months when she pops.
Thanks for sharing! Ignore ignorance, you know some of us loved it!
Omg I never read anything so hot in my life. Makes me wish my daddy was alive
very hot. i'm dripping wet. I love daddy/daughter stories. i'm so horny. wish i could find an older man to fuck me right now.
Too, too hot! Let's get her on the pill and enjoy another chapter!
Every woman knows where her hymen is, or was. It covers the entrance to the vagina, it's not inside.
Made me so wet
I'm 23, he's 45. Been teasing him for years hoping to get him to fuck me just like in your story. I masturbate every night thinking of him being inside me. I'm firstname.lastname@example.org if you wanna chat
Very well written. Very tittalated. Geeze you did a awesome job. Keep writting.
This show's how all girl's should lose their virginity, to their daddy, who love's them and take's his time to show it...
I to love daddy daughter stories.
This was very good, starting with a foot massage is a real good way of getting your mouth on some pussy.
Once you lick it, you can dick it.
Better if she is a virgin.
Glad to know you ladies know that.
Foot rub anyone?
You just keep getting better with each story. In this one I like the way you switch the descriptions of the event from kitten-first person to dad-first person. I have one more story of yours to go so keep it up. Start your story build up longer before the sex stuff. You had me stroking my cock and I almost came. If you need more experience with the art of fucking so you can describe it in more detail in future stories I'll be glad to teach you without charge. HaHa.
Super story! Really hot! Your characters were perfect and your dual perspective was a really great way to increase the interest! Nice job! So, what is your inspiration for this story?
It's hard to know the daughter that wants a love making with their handsome daddy.
I love this story and I love the comments from daughters who ache to have their big strong daddy just fucking take them. It's important that the girl in the story is a virgin. My opinion is that it's a father's job to bust his baby girl's cherry, part of a dad's job description. That's not a thing to leave to some pimple-faced youth her own age who doesn't give a shit about anything but getting his rocks off. A father loves his little girl, and he'll take all the care and concern needed to get her over this "hump." The comments are good, because they can help dads who are reading to make up their minds. Lots and lots of fathers look over their sweet child now that she's grown, they admire her voluptuous curves, they think about her adorable little coochie and get so hard that their cock is practically busting out of their pants. Little do they know that their dear child is wild to give up her cooch to her daddy. She wants her father's fat veiny daddy-dick as much as he wants his baby girl's tight little twat. When he unloads his heavy daddy-balls and fills her sweet slit with some of the same sperm that made her, they both know that that's exactly where his creamy sperm belongs.
I have mixed feelings about the story... While it was really well written and pretty enjoyable it had a few annoying flaws. The first one huge. The author doesnt have a clue as to where the hymen is located. For those readers who dont know and dont care, then the story was just fine, but for those of us that do, well it kinda ruins the story. Sigh. So many writers on here that write about hymens but have never seen one and dont even do the research!
...the other issue was less annoying but.., the dude had just finished cumming and just climbs up and starts fucking her. Uh, not likely!
...anyway setting those aside, the story was nicely written and I appreciate the effort.
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