More of a flash story! The characters stayed true!
Could have been longer and fleshed out more but was not really necessary just more of
Well written good job. Please keep up the writing and posting!
Thank you for your work
she did not die alone - he forgave her - u get a 5.
For the read.
He is not quite the hard ass he plays to be -
But he had his pride too lol
No, he didn't forgive her, but he was there and made sure she didn't die alone. The hard ass turned softy. He would never admit it, however, but it helped him earn a few points with God. You did good tough guy.
Thought this was very well done! Hero covering for friend that he knew would get a scholly was a bit of a far reach BUT the example of over betrayed people taking it out on those that they can was OUTSTANDING!
Wounded people wound others!
He lies to protect someone he really doesn't care for and she canes him badly. Then the school nurse wants to report her for abuse and the Principal won't allow it? First question - the Principal has no say and is not the Nurse required by law to report the abuse? Or lose her license? Second question - where were his parents? If she beat him that badly surely his parents would have filed charges against her and the school. Third question - If he hates her that much and holds a grudge that long why would he even consider having sex with her? Fourthly, considering his hatred for her why would he go to her bedside when she was dying? There are just too many things happening in this story that don't add up. And in the end, he doesn't tell her that he doesn't forgive her until after she has passed away, making his statement superfluous . This whole thing just didn't add up to a decent story.
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