This is turning of to be a good series, I have a idea for you, have Ashley become a sub as well with Jenny, with Ashley being slightly dominant over Jenny, and after the prom they have a big gang-bang at the Le Chateau Club
I think that you have written a wonderful story. I think that the incest part would go over good with your many fans.
End it with a Happily Ever After!
Let me first say thankyou for adding another chapter to this series as always it was great. Heres my sugestion start with jenny and ashley going to prom. While at the same time have jenny's mom go through an induction test at the club with karen and megan calling the shots. Then finish with a gang bang at jenny's house with everyone where the incest can take place. Followed by the happy ever after ending wraping it all up.
Please don't end this story just yet, there's still too much to tell.
I would love to see Jenny and Ashley continue to develop a deep relationship that culminates at prom with their admission of love for each other. Then continue their growing relationship thru graduation and into summer.
At the same time, I'd like to see a real D/s relationship grow between Megan and Jenny's mom, where Jenny's mom ends up becoming Megan's girlfriend and committed submissive. You can take the summer to develop the relationships, with lots of fun activities, including the club and the quick return of Senator Green.
I'd like to see Jenny, Ashley and Jenny's mom grow closer to Megan, as she becomes their permanent Dom and lover, and Jenny's mom's girlfriend and partner.
As summer slowly closes, you can gently push Karen out of the story by sending her out of state for college, while Jenny and Ashley decide to go to the local college.
Then I would like to see Jenny's mom move in with Megan, while Ashley moves in with Jenny. Ashley and Jenny can be girlfriends, yet both are submissive to Megan, along with Jenny's mom.
This gives you the opportunity to develop a dialogue between characters where Megan discovers that both Jenny and her mom have developed dark fantasies. Megan and Ashley can work together in their plan, and at an end of summer party, Jenny and her mom are put into a situation where they have sex...if you desire to go this direction.
Also...this will allow you two new story paths if you choose. You could follow Megan and Jenny's mom as their relationship continues and Megan begins teaching Jenny's mom everything about D/s relationships and BDSM. Or, you could follow Jenny and Ashley as they start their life living together as lovers, and their college experiences, with Karen making brief returns for holidays.
Whatever your decision, this was a great story!
I think Karen should punish Jenny by making her commit incest with her mom , jenny should then tell Karen she wants to be Ashleys girlfriend and go to prom with her , Karen gets upset as she is actually in love with Jenny , so Jenny turns tables and becomes Karens dom and they start a threeway relationship ( ashley , Jenny and Karen ) ,also Mom becomes Megans only sub , thanks Paul
incest and prom in the next one
Write all of them. That way we can enjoy more chapters.
Not only should mom and jenny taste the sweet fruits but no reason not to include Ashley too. mom should Really know here daughters girlfriend.
BTW we all know you are holding out mom submitting to Mistress Megan!
Hello love your work. Why not have Jenny become more sexually aggressive to her new girl friend. Jenny could make her do some naughty things at school, and maybe fuck her cunt and or ass with a strapon. Maybe even have jenny's mom get some of that action.
I'm perfectly happy with all of those options except this story ending. :)
Begin with what happens at school the next day, maybe with ashley seeing karen and jenny, maybe participating. (no hurt feelings or break up please).
Prom later, with aftermath in le chateau, with senator green. (ashley and jenny as twin subs for the rest).
No incest it makes the story seem cheep , jenny and ash love ,mom and Megan love and get temp subs to play with, Karen finds girl and boy subs, Jenny's friend becomes jenny,'s total sub and pet and moves in.
Jenny hatches a plan to make Karen her sub. Prom is a part of it. Story moves to the club. (Every story with the club is fantastic.) With the help of Megan, Karen is manipulated by the senator and others from your stories, at the club. Karen is put in her place as she willingly goes under the table to please Jenny where Ashley is pleasing Megan.
Great chapter! She feels something more than just raw sex although that is always great. Keep these two together but let them decide how much they are going to share themselves with others. Ahhhh, love is in the air........
I would like to see the relationship deepen between ashley and jenny. Their relationship was built with them as equals. No one was the dom or sub. It should stay that way. Please no incest
first of all I love this series alot! actually I love all the stuff you write! please continue with jenny and ashely I love what happening between them and I feel that it's only just begun. I think adding a incest element wouldn't be a good addition because she already has two doms she needs to keep her relationship with her mom as it is. her mom being her sub would just be gross. there is already plenty of stories like that don't talk the easy way out. but any way you decide to go please just keep writing this series because it's awesome!
I hope to see their relationship blooms
I enjoy your stories very much. Its good to hear that this series has a special place in your heart. You wrote in your introduction that you originally intended this to be an end-of-story story, but you must realize that this chapter wasn't a real ending. There are too many loose ends. If nothing else, wrap up most of them.
What to do? Well, it depends mostly on your heart and your mood. They seem to have led your talent very well so far. Your earlier chapters were much longer than the later ones. This let a lot of things happen in a single chapter. Shorter chapters beg for the action to be more contained. There are so many characters and relationships, most of them crossed in some way, that it might be time to split them off into their own chapters or even into separate series. This would let you write to your heart's content as the mood moved you. Karen's dominance of Jenny could be its own story, with any other characters being "walk-ons." Jenny and Ashley dealing with the consequences of coming out could be a series in itself (again with side references to other characters), and so on. Of course there are the many worthy suggestions already offered by others (seriously Anonymous people, go ahead and join Literotica).
As far as the incest idea goes, the story thus far doesn't show much foreshadowing of it. Jenny may have exhibited a vague interest in the notion (in chapter 2 or 3), but the dynamics portrayed in the last 2 chapters seem to me to tilt away from that. However, if Mom or Jenny were upset over ...something... and the other were to be there offering comfort, then it might be congruent for the comforting hug to become more. Tears wiped away from a cheek might extend naturally into a caress of a neck. This could lead to gentle comfort with sexual overtones, even if they didn't go all the way. On the other hand, that same caress could elicit a sharp inhale, a piercing look and intimacy that explodes.
Sorry to go on so long, but your writing affects me.
i like the idea of karen becoming submissive to jenny. she seems to have already lost some control and it would be very interesting seeing the two characters evolve in separate direction
I think the Girls should have a fun night at Prom and end up at Le Château Club for a nght they never forget.
My be Jenny should go to prom with Ashley. Before they and Karen end up at Le Château Club with Jennys mother and Megan or Karen on a date and and meet Senator Green who takes them back to hers. They could also maybe meet the three other girls from the last time as well.
While its understood this story is something close to your creative heart, my vote is to end it here before it gets too warped in confusion that goes with simply keeping it going. Very good story please let it stand on its own unless another chapter comes to you naturally.
That said I would like to hear more from 'A Perfect Fall' as Chapter Two was disappointing after Chapter One was simply one of your finest...if you recall Chapter One began with a flash forward to the woman being so used/pleasured with a different hair color than what became obviously her original yet the story never caught up to that flash. Lets just say I am still wondering and interested...
u cannot end it n e thing but end i still want to know more of what happens between jenny and ashley
i would love to see more romance :3
Great chapter but i would love the story to continue with the ultimate sin commited and her mother becoming her slave
This story is great without the need for incest. How ever you plan to continue the story I feel it would be better with out Jenny fucking her mom.
I think the girls should goto the prom. Then on another night they both could goto the Le Château Club with Karen, Megan and Jennys mother on a date. Miss Morgan could even be talked into to going and Sabrina could be made to go by Karen. Once there they could meet Senator Green and her daughter who take them all back to hers for a weekend as sex slaves to herself and some of her powerful friends. Jenny and her mother could also end up in a foursome with Senator Green and her daughter. This doesnt mean they should commit incest but it is the only way I could ever see it happening as Karen despite being the only one who would get off on it she is not strong enough (she is herself controled by Megan) to make them and Megan althought strong enough she is not sick enough. That leaves Senator Green and her daughter as the only one's who could.
Also in chapter 2 you told how Senator Green took Jenny back to hers and in chapter
3 you never went into details. I feel that there is an untold story there. Aslo in chapter 2 you had two girls who thanks to Megan fould out their soon to be married friend was a lesbian as well there is another story there maybe as a stand alone or as part of the series maybe with her becoming miss Morgan's or Karen's girlfriend.
mmmmmm my pussy is still tingling thankyou so much
I love your writing generally but i do adore this series. I think this one has a lot more to go and at least all your ideas should have their chapters as each is a chapter in its own right.
i really don't think that you should end the series though. i think you should do into it all. Jenny's punishment for not texting back, jenny going to prom with ashley as well as karen and who ever she brings(maybe jenny's mom) and having them all going to Le Château Club. and yes i think jenny and her mom should have sex. maybe a threesome with megan. or even a 4some with megan and karen. that would be really hot.
I think Megan and Jenny's mother should end up having maybe a long term thing and Jenny and Karen could continue to be her slaves. I absolutely am not into incest, so I hope that doesn't happen. I wouldn't mind if they had sex with the same people in the same room as long as it's not with each other. I don't want a happily ever after ending but I definitely see Ashley and Jenny going to prom together. I'm hoping that Karen gets super jealous and some drama and power struggles start. At prom some sort of group sex could occur with Jenny's teacher and Ashley. That would be fun. Anyways please write soon! I definitely want to hear more about Jenny's teacher and the romance between Ashley and Jenny.
i def think it should be prom!
i think it's fine to end the Jenny/ ashley saga where it is. Instead of ending the story simply change the focus to her mother. Have Megan take her to Le Chateau. have Karen continue to dominate her. Perhaps karen could have an outing, party or retreat where Susan is taken by a number of Karen's friends. If you were to extend the story to Karen's college years she could be forced to sevice karen's roommmates, sorority sister's. Consider having Karen's mother catch the two of tem together. Susan could become the sub of both mother and daughter.
You should continue with what happens the next day. I really want to see more of Jenny and Ashley...and maybe Megan and Jenny's mom could end up in a serious relationship. I don't think Jenny and her mom should have sex because I think that would complicate the story but whatever you do don't end the story here.
They should complete the ultimate sin!
Yes she should make her mother her slut and also bring senator green.
i like what dawn96 said. i would lime to see more with Ashley's and Jenny's relationship and maybe see meg and amy? together. would live to hear about prom. i really dont see jen and her mom, they dont see the type unless forced into it and that doesnt feel right. I'm not ready to let go of this story. i really do enjoy it. also sorry for gramer and spelling errors. I'm on my phone at work. lol.
If Jenny and her mom are not gonna fuck in the next part, i am not gonna read yours anymore.. Mind it..!! Ignore the non sense comments about not including incest..!!
I say keep this story going and do all four in the order u listed them otherwise ur leaving us with loose ends and that's no way to end a series
Should Jenny and her mother commit the ultimate sin...incest?
Should I continue with what happens at school the next day after her sinful Sunday?
Should I bring back Senator Green from part 2?
Should Jenny go to prom with Ashley where they all end up at Le Château Club?
Like the incest and club idea a lot and I think it would make a great addition to the series.
you should make the next part about jenny and ashley going to prom and afterwards the club
yes to all of the above but you should make the part about jenny and ashley going to prom the same length or more as chapter 3. that would make a great conclusion if you wrapped it all up with the prom story but I'm confident that i can say that everyone wants to hear about jenny and mom, the next day at school, senator green, and prom. i would be very upset if you did not continue the story.
I just want to say I never comment on stories, but I've become such a fan of your stories and this series I just had to tell you what a great job you've been doing. Keep it up and i would love to hear a story about jenny and her mother.
You LOVE this story and it is really good. trust your instincts on where i could see with the ideas you had you could get easily a number of ideas. personally i would start where you ended then prom. the incest s your call.
Yes to the 1st, 2nd, and 4th ideas! Love all ur stories!
I would really like to see you pursue all the story ideas you put forth and after achieving all of that I would like a finale story collecting all of the characters at a weekend long party held at Jenny and her mother's house showing every characters dominant and submissive side along with any new characters you choose to introduce along the way. THANKS for a very enticing enjoyable escape.
I honestly don't know what to suggest, I just don't want this story to stop. It's extremely hot, and surprisingly emotional too.
i would love seeing all the ideas in a future chapter except the first one. not really a fan of mother/daughter incest
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