Strip Club

Editing

Could not finish reading due to the numerous word choice errors, spelling errors and grammar errors. The content may or may not be great, but with so many errors it was hard to read. Take time to proofread your work or find a proofreader to help you clean things up. Hope to read great things in the future.

Spelling and grammar

Horrible spelling and grammar made the story unreadable. Correct it and repost it.

Meh

Looks like it was typed with dragon dictation software by a hillbilly

bad

Grammer sucked. Story just ok

Utter shit

Example:

"I when to my hotel and changed into slack and a knit shit."

You when? Knit shit?

Please write no more.

YUK!

I couldn't even get beyod the second sentence!

Learn to write proper English!

What a waste of time to read this F'ed-up pile of crap. LEARN TO WRITE CORRECT ENGLISH.
I understand we have authors from around the world but his story sucked ass.

Need To Proof Read!

"knit shit"??????

Buy a spell checker!

So many grammatical and spelling errors it's almost unreadable.

coins?

"...threw coins on the stage". Really? For a stripper? Did she slap you, or was she just so butt uuuuugly from some back water town?

Quit Writing

English Dumbass do you speak it

Dude,

i am not from here, but even I had to quit by the 3rd chapter.... SORRY 1*. Story sucks.

Difficult to read

Grammatical and spelling errors caused it to be difficult to read. Toss in the fact that anyone who has ever gone to a strip club knows that coins do not change hands made it even more difficult to read. Sorry to say, but it was just not very good.

Learn the language before you try to write it

Sorry, but this story was ruined by the writer's clear inability to speak and understand English.

From missing words, ridiculous phrases and no knowledge of specific words [necked instead of naked] I found this an ordeal of marathon proportions.

You probably have a talent for writing, so until your English improves, have someone edit and spell check your work.

Good luck in the future.

Wow

My favorite line was "I figured most of the women were prostates look in for a John"

There were numerous prostate glands looking for a restroom? And you figured, you weren't sure if they were prostates or not? I guess I can understand that, I always get the prostate and the pituitary glands mixed up.

Sorry dude, usually I would say don't worry about what people say, but even a horny fucker like me couldnt make it past 4 paragraphs. This sucks.

This sucks, can't read this shit.

Learn the language

SEVEN spelling and grammatical errors in the first paragraph!! Quit after three paragraphs. Too painful to continue.

Oh boy. How do these people get published?

I don't understand how this got published! I have had writing rejected that was no-way-near as poor as this. It may or may not be a great story. Who could tell? The poor sentance structure & all the errors make it really hard to read. Take time to proofread your work people!!!

This has to be a joke!

Relax, people! Tis mst b a jke!

Holy Crap!!!

Like several others who've posted here, I couldn't get past the first two or three paragraphs. Spelling, grammer, etc., almost like this writer came from another planet. Someone here needs to pull this post ASAP.

Where are the moderators?

Like others who posted, I have had stories sent back for minor style errors and correction of minor punctuation. I can't believe a moderator read this.

Great story! Strip clubs rock!!!!!!!!

seriously needs an editor

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