You did s good job on this story but to leave it unfinished is not a good writer so let's see HOW you are going tof finish up this story (-:
by
Anonymous03/20/16
Guess he's just another internet virgin
The guy in this story has no clue about actually enjoying sex with women. His only sexual reference is clearly internet porn videos. The whole impulse to slut-shame and dominate (actually humiliate) a woman by sharing her with other males including random strangers is highly queer also.
He's barely had the chance to experience her one time himself and his first plan of action to go forward is how to get her to have sex with other guys - seriously? That's oddly gay right there. Sharing your beer with your buds is fine. Being anxious to share your newly-scored lover-mom with them - that ain't hetero, dude.
The setup in the first chapter about the masked ball and auction was interesting and, even though the sex action kind of fumbled along with a lot of repeated phrases, it was enough to see how things would continue on the day after. This chapter was a lot of garbage like it was written from a different guy's viewpoint. Like another comment said, he was a shy inexperienced virgin now he's changed overnight into a big dominating stud who's trying to get his pet mommy to have sex with his pals instead of leaving her instructions "to seduce her son" which should have been the obvious move. It was queer and misogynist all the way in chapter two.
First chapter deserves a generous 3/5 for a workable idea. This one needs 1/5 for losing the plot completely.
by
Anonymous03/20/16
And I gave it a 5 out of 5 for a good story and effort
eat shit annony
by
Anonymous03/31/16
Love where this is going. Please finish it. Maybe have hubby/daddy eat cream pie. Since dad bought someone on Halloween too, after mom accepts son, dad can have gf. Son gets to play with her to, but not take her from dad
by
Anonymous04/06/16
Very hot
Part 3 eagerly awaited! I hope Mom flashes the fuck out to all and sundry while managing by a whisker to actually get fucked by her son only, and then not very often so as to keep her on edge as much as possible. 5 stars for parts 1 and 2!
by
Anonymous04/16/16
Wanted: Chapter 03
It has been a very long waiting. Longing to read Chapter 03! Please.
by
Anonymous04/21/16
A FEW SUGGESTIONS!!!!
would (-took) (take) control (of) her
nipples (were) easily visible
half hour (half-hour)
bought to much clothes (so many)
assortment (of) new pieces
was matching (were)
g-strings (G-strings)
GLUED (-on) his which were (-GLUED) on her ass (to) (focused) (9 WORDS)
strip tease (striptease)
aureoles (areolas)
g-string (G-string)
his breathe (breath) (2)
new cell phone. It wasn't cheap (WHY NOT BUY A BURNER PHONE???? IT’S CHEAP!!!!)
wrap around (wrap-around)
parent's bedroom (parents’)
flight (of) stairs
DON'T LEAVE US HANGING!!!! TELL US HIS PLAN!!!!
by
Anonymous04/21/16
1*
Vote 1* for every story rated by THE FAT WHORE (that's what her clients call her) aka BONNIE/VASTIE aka ANON!
Seriously, it has been four years, and you have posted other stories in the meantime
by
Anonymous10/05/16
Heres an ending for you
Rachel starts sucking off everyone she comes across because she is just so darn horny. Eventually she gets herpes and her husband leaves her. The life she built is over because her son's D unlocked her inner slut.
by
Anonymous11/17/16
should give you a 05 for leaving a story in the lurch for 4 years. The writers on here need to learn you work on one story at a time until it's finished.. If you need to work on more then one to break block or something then fine but you don't post stories and then do other stories while the first one is not done.
What a scum of the earth slut whore! There is not enough money for me to fuck a diseased whore like that. The skank probably has had every disease known!
English
Great Second Part!
Waiting for part 3. This is a great story so far.
on the auction block
You did s good job on this story but to leave it unfinished is not a good writer so let's see HOW you are going tof finish up this story (-:
Guess he's just another internet virgin
The guy in this story has no clue about actually enjoying sex with women. His only sexual reference is clearly internet porn videos. The whole impulse to slut-shame and dominate (actually humiliate) a woman by sharing her with other males including random strangers is highly queer also.
He's barely had the chance to experience her one time himself and his first plan of action to go forward is how to get her to have sex with other guys - seriously? That's oddly gay right there. Sharing your beer with your buds is fine. Being anxious to share your newly-scored lover-mom with them - that ain't hetero, dude.
The setup in the first chapter about the masked ball and auction was interesting and, even though the sex action kind of fumbled along with a lot of repeated phrases, it was enough to see how things would continue on the day after. This chapter was a lot of garbage like it was written from a different guy's viewpoint. Like another comment said, he was a shy inexperienced virgin now he's changed overnight into a big dominating stud who's trying to get his pet mommy to have sex with his pals instead of leaving her instructions "to seduce her son" which should have been the obvious move. It was queer and misogynist all the way in chapter two.
First chapter deserves a generous 3/5 for a workable idea. This one needs 1/5 for losing the plot completely.
And I gave it a 5 out of 5 for a good story and effort
eat shit annony
Love where this is going. Please finish it. Maybe have hubby/daddy eat cream pie. Since dad bought someone on Halloween too, after mom accepts son, dad can have gf. Son gets to play with her to, but not take her from dad
Very hot
Part 3 eagerly awaited! I hope Mom flashes the fuck out to all and sundry while managing by a whisker to actually get fucked by her son only, and then not very often so as to keep her on edge as much as possible. 5 stars for parts 1 and 2!
Wanted: Chapter 03
It has been a very long waiting. Longing to read Chapter 03! Please.
A FEW SUGGESTIONS!!!!
would (-took) (take) control (of) her
nipples (were) easily visible
half hour (half-hour)
bought to much clothes (so many)
assortment (of) new pieces
was matching (were)
g-strings (G-strings)
GLUED (-on) his which were (-GLUED) on her ass (to) (focused) (9 WORDS)
strip tease (striptease)
aureoles (areolas)
g-string (G-string)
his breathe (breath) (2)
new cell phone. It wasn't cheap (WHY NOT BUY A BURNER PHONE???? IT’S CHEAP!!!!)
wrap around (wrap-around)
parent's bedroom (parents’)
flight (of) stairs
DON'T LEAVE US HANGING!!!! TELL US HIS PLAN!!!!
1*
Vote 1* for every story rated by THE FAT WHORE (that's what her clients call her) aka BONNIE/VASTIE aka ANON!
Well?
Waiting for part three please. Good storyline but I think we'd all like to see the ending.
Yummy2
Love it, need to read part three please!
Hurry!!
Part 3,4,5,6,7,8,9,10 please!!!!!
You are just going to leaave us hanging??
Seriously, it has been four years, and you have posted other stories in the meantime
Heres an ending for you
Rachel starts sucking off everyone she comes across because she is just so darn horny. Eventually she gets herpes and her husband leaves her. The life she built is over because her son's D unlocked her inner slut.
should give you a 05 for leaving a story in the lurch for 4 years. The writers on here need to learn you work on one story at a time until it's finished.. If you need to work on more then one to break block or something then fine but you don't post stories and then do other stories while the first one is not done.
WOW
What a scum of the earth slut whore! There is not enough money for me to fuck a diseased whore like that. The skank probably has had every disease known!
Please more
Please more,damn how could u leave it like that.thats cold
more?
need up date.....
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