Better with Age Ch. 01

very exciting

If you want people to read your stories ...

... then make sure you PROOF READ them!!

First paragraph, second sentence - "It was such a great feeling having the hot spays of water moving down all around her, ..." - presumably by 'spays' you actually meant 'sprays'?
Couldn't even spare the time to proof read the first paragraph? Let alone the rest of it!!

Aren't some people small minded. I am referring to one the previous comments.

Good read

I can't wait for chapter 2. This was a great warm up, and I can't wait for the next step. Zgirl.

Yumm

This is why I read stories... Natural excitement paired with knowing there is more... Aaaackkk! I admit, I'm so wet just waiting for what cums next. :)

COMMENT TO MR. PROoF READ!

where do these asses come from that come to the site looking to make grammer corrections?????? good job ...keep writing...and if iwere you id delete any of these morons comments as fast as they post them...it really pisses them off!!!..lol.....they can only post 1 annomous (opps i didnt proof that word) then they habe to post there real user name..DELETE the lame comments