I guess I am confused, why the camera is there is no promise of a second or third chapter ?
I look forward to seeing more! Could use a bit more pausing for detail, but the plot is great so far. *****
Maybe they need to be punished?
What a daughter that is and her friends
Ok it's been a year. So, where's that 2nd part..?
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And the point is ?
I guess I am confused, why the camera is there is no promise of a second or third chapter ?
Great Start
I look forward to seeing more! Could use a bit more pausing for detail, but the plot is great so far. *****
Naughty, naughty girls!
Maybe they need to be punished?
Unbelievable
What a daughter that is and her friends
Where's the next part you promised?
Ok it's been a year. So, where's that 2nd part..?
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