A hot and sexy, if very short story. Well done for conveying so much in so few words, but please note - 'nice' is incorrectly used an an adverb; it should be 'nicely'. Apart from that, a good read. Four stars.
Thanks for the heat, just my type of story!
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Not at all bad.
A hot and sexy, if very short story. Well done for conveying so much in so few words, but please note - 'nice' is incorrectly used an an adverb; it should be 'nicely'.
Apart from that, a good read. Four stars.
Hot
Thanks for the heat, just my type of story!
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