"You are nothing but a loser, loser." With solidly entertaining fights like that, the one-liners aren't required to be devastatingly witty, and even adds a little realism to the moment. Great job! Enjoying the story so far and looking forward to more.
i have just read chapter 18 on mum gets nude... are u going to keep me on the edge of my seat as long with this story????? great writing.
Really enjoying this story. More please.
The foundation has been laid. Now the sexual tension rises. Great pacing.
The comment about that pacing right, you hit the nail on the head with it
the suspense...lol
...but very enthusiastic. The excitement is palpable in his random and regular segues and thought-streams. An enjoyable read :)
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"You are nothing but a loser, loser."
With solidly entertaining fights like that, the one-liners aren't required to be devastatingly witty, and even adds a little realism to the moment. Great job! Enjoying the story so far and looking forward to more.
how many chapters
i have just read chapter 18 on mum gets nude... are u going to keep me on the edge of my seat as long with this story?????
great writing.
THank you
Really enjoying this story. More please.
Rising Tension!
The foundation has been laid. Now the sexual tension rises. Great pacing.
impressive
The comment about that pacing right, you hit the nail on the head with it
the suspense...lol
Still wordy...
...but very enthusiastic. The excitement is palpable in his random and regular segues and thought-streams.
An enjoyable read :)
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Back to Young Woman with Older Man Ch. 02 or
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