When I saw this chapter this morning I naturally went back to the beginning. I immediately noticed a marked improvement from the one previous story of yours that I read some time back. There is better character development and a better flow to the story. I am going to go back through some of your other works and check out the changes. Keep going, and enjoying. I'm actually looking forward to seeing where you go with this one.
ok i have my first and only critique. how does a woman (jamie) that was beaten with a bamboo pole, collapses in the doorway, bruises all over her body, go from that to 'fuck me' within only a few hours(i assume the time)??? other than the super human recovery, im lovin this one...if you were a guy i would say YOU DA MAN!!!
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From the beginning
When I saw this chapter this morning I naturally went back to the beginning. I immediately noticed a marked improvement from the one previous story of yours that I read some time back. There is better character development and a better flow to the story. I am going to go back through some of your other works and check out the changes. Keep going, and enjoying. I'm actually looking forward to seeing where you go with this one.
Cheers,
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ok i have my first and only critique. how does a woman (jamie) that was beaten with a bamboo pole, collapses in the doorway, bruises all over her body, go from that to 'fuck me' within only a few hours(i assume the time)??? other than the super human recovery, im lovin this one...if you were a guy i would say YOU DA MAN!!!
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