Picture Imperfect

Very Good!

Bucky, you got it right. The dialogue suits the character. So hot I didn't bother to quibble.

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wow I loved your story - hope to hear more about the two. you have talent!

Nice story

Nice story, interesting, kept my attention and sometimes that is hard to do! Was well written too! Good job!
MW

A really powerful piece of eroticism

I very rarely award five points, but I had no choice here: the narrative was totally credible, you decribed the characters and situations eloquently, the dialogue was completely realistic and the outcome most satisfying. Well done.

(Most models I've worked with keep clothed till launch, but wear loose tops and non-elasticated sweatpants. Not a bone of contention, since I've mainly worked with paint.)

Wow, brought flashbacks to my first time with a woman. The odd familiar-ness yet curiosity.
My fav. line: "It was an orgasm I had created in her body and I felt accomplished in a way I had never experienced with a man."
It does feel really special to do that for a woman. Indescribable. You managed to capture a pure encounter with simple honesty. Keep it up!

cool

continue? was good. you could start a story out of this.

Just wow. Very nice story.

Good story

Very good writing

Truly fun first time lesbian story. Great setting. 5 stars!

Very nice

Enjoyed it very much, it stirred me up!

That was a very nice first time lesbian story with a good setting. Thanks!

Says it all!

"I'm yours," she said, kissing my lips again. "You can't hurt me."
What a line...just perfect! Thank you

Oh....

I enjoyed the innocense, the build up and the conclusion. excellent writing !
So much more than most "fist time" stories! Beautifully done. Thank You!

wow

That was ideal. It was natural... simple and saturated with her personality.

Longer

Make your stories longer, too short for me but i gave you 5 stars

Wordless

I loved this story so much. I'm not generally one for an incredibly long build up, but the story seemed so real, that it reminded me of when an off the shelf fantasy novel goes from words on a page, to a picture in my head, and I don't see the pages turning. I may recognize that I only clicked to page 2 to get to the end, but the story was infinitely long, and not long enough, because I wasn't reading, I was watching a film-short in my head.

Wow

Absolutely amazing