Wow, that was like awesome. So much better than most of the daddy/daughter stories. You brought a very strong sense of love to it. I can't wait to read the next chapter.
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Anonymous08/08/12
Really?
That's it. With no pre-thought or such, her dad tells her to go ahead and touch it? No, we shouldn't or it's wrong or at least a slower build-up. Sorry, but totally unrealistic.
What was that? No build up at all, No preliminaries just run his fingers in her pussy then plunge his cock into her like a teenage boy and cum.
Second time around wasn't much better, he could have at least went down on her.
He didn't even take the time to seduce her so it was only one step away from Rape.
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Anonymous08/09/12
Innocent - I liked it!
I didn't mind the lack of "oh we shouldn't" cliched resistance. This was a sweet, erotic piece of escapism. Works for me!
Great start to your incest story writing! I sure hope there will be a part 2. Keep up the good work!
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Anonymous08/16/12
STICK
To your other genre's
No buildup... No "No from daddy or daughter"
It reads like a teen lover's lane poke.
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Anonymous08/21/12
Good Start
It was a good read, and certainly did its job. I would tend to agree that it was refreshing to read something that wasnt just another "cut and paste" incest story.
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Anonymous11/01/12
GOOD JOB!!!!!!!!!!!!!
I've never written an incest story, but I think out of all i've read of them, this was the BEST!!!! ABSOLUTELY, POSITIVELY, MOST SPECTACULAR JOB EVER!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! !!:) :) :) :) :) :) :) :)
English
Very nice ...
I like your style ... good story - thank you...
wow..
Very nice story...thank you
m-so nice and special
Wow, that was like awesome. So much better than most of the daddy/daughter stories. You brought a very strong sense of love to it. I can't wait to read the next chapter.
Really?
That's it. With no pre-thought or such, her dad tells her to go ahead and touch it? No, we shouldn't or it's wrong or at least a slower build-up. Sorry, but totally unrealistic.
Huh?
What was that? No build up at all, No preliminaries just run his fingers in her pussy then plunge his cock into her like a teenage boy and cum.
Second time around wasn't much better, he could have at least went down on her.
He didn't even take the time to seduce her so it was only one step away from Rape.
Innocent - I liked it!
I didn't mind the lack of "oh we shouldn't" cliched resistance. This was a sweet, erotic piece of escapism. Works for me!
good start hopefully more to come
GREAT Start
Great start to your incest story writing! I sure hope there will be a part 2. Keep up the good work!
STICK
To your other genre's
No buildup... No "No from daddy or daughter"
It reads like a teen lover's lane poke.
Good Start
It was a good read, and certainly did its job. I would tend to agree that it was refreshing to read something that wasnt just another "cut and paste" incest story.
GOOD JOB!!!!!!!!!!!!!
I've never written an incest story, but I think out of all i've read of them, this was the BEST!!!! ABSOLUTELY, POSITIVELY, MOST SPECTACULAR JOB EVER!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! !!:) :) :) :) :) :) :) :)
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