"Emily kept whispering that she needed to keep quite."
Should that be 'quiet'?
"both more personal and more intimate, sand more satisfying. "??
'sand'?? Should that be "and"?
That's two examples. Don't you do any proof reading?
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Anonymous08/07/12
Would have liked to have known this was a lesbian storyline, if I did I never would have started it. It does nothing for me, please put a disclaimer before stories like this.
*smiles* Hey, don't let the other Anonymous reviewers get ya down-- I personally liked the story, even though it did need a bit of spelling editing. Yet there's something that this story has-- characters which are well-described and more than opposite, and the most important thing: The story has feelings!! There's a connection of friendship underlying this, and the ending is more than hopeful in both of them getting together. *smiles* All in all-- great job!! XD
English
"Emily kept whispering that she needed to keep quite."
Should that be 'quiet'?
"both more personal and more intimate, sand more satisfying. "??
'sand'?? Should that be "and"?
That's two examples. Don't you do any proof reading?
Would have liked to have known this was a lesbian storyline, if I did I never would have started it. It does nothing for me, please put a disclaimer before stories like this.
*grins* Sweet Feelings
*smiles* Hey, don't let the other Anonymous reviewers get ya down-- I personally liked the story, even though it did need a bit of spelling editing. Yet there's something that this story has-- characters which are well-described and more than opposite, and the most important thing: The story has feelings!! There's a connection of friendship underlying this, and the ending is more than hopeful in both of them getting together. *smiles* All in all-- great job!! XD
Wrong catagory
Therefore, 1*.
Love It 😘
I love what I've read so far.
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