I thought you did an outsanding job with your story. If I have any regret, it would only be because it wasn't much longer than it was. Thanks for a story that was worth reading; they are becoming all too rare on this site!!!!
Me gusta mucho tus noticias. Esta fue la apuesta de todos! Gracias a mi amigo. Thank you for a good story Amigo.
You got it started, can't wait for part 2
but once it's lost, it gone. Some where inside he knew from the way she looked at her ex the marriage was doomed. He like most people believe that they had a chance. but lets look at it logically. 100% of all marriages, 50 to 60% percent of men/women cheat, roughly 60% end up divorced. 15% get divorced over money, 10% get divorced over religon, and another 10 to 15% just grow apart. So maybe 10 to 15% percent of marriages go till death. For those few that have lived by their vows bless them for they are very rare.
As far as your comment, I disagree. Everyone has baggage except for those lucky few. Everything in your life has mad you the man you are to day. That same baggage you carry with you every day is the reason you learn to trust. They have to earn it, it isn't given freely.....and those who been hurt don't give that trust easily, she knew his history and did it anyway. As far as the hiding money, women do that everyday. Their rainy day funds, their me money or what else they call it but does it mean they don't trust their husband or do they just try and sve their own money.
@ Hue I think the tendency in the Scandinavian countries and Hungary is the next 40% of the children were born out of marriage (10 years ago in Hungary was this figure only 30%.. The parents of the children live together without marriage certificate. I have a bunch of collegues who live togheter and bring up their children without marriage certificate, but a collegue who did marriage she is divorcing her spouse with 2 children after 4 years. The DNA test 99,99% sure and the paternity is not sure in a marriage according to your stories.
May It be the future, the wedding will be the crown of a succesful children bringing up after 10-15-20 years to the first child birth????? DGHear has an excellent Romantic story about such a pair. In this case the majority of the marriage candidates will be above 40 years old, againsrt the nowdays between 20-30 years old
These Several Cuck Stories are a good symtom, which gives to the youth that idea not to marry............
In the US, it depends on what state you live in but if you live with a woman long enough, she becomes your common law wife. ANd even with out a marriage license she will still get some type of alimony. And as far as my stories go,DNA is a big thing because over n1/3 of the test come back 0.00 chance that the husband is the father. That's why the US has laws that try and prevent men from getting fucked over. That only work a small amount of the time because once the child is a certain age, its your reguardless of the DNA test.
It seems Jerry has a knack of marrying the wrong women. Let's hope he got it right this time.
Great tale... except for one thing. Asshole needed to get put in a fuckin' hurt locker! I had to subtract a star for that.
@IronDragon Why only 4****? This story gave that idea, that the main characters start secret fund in their marriages in my stories!
While I can understand the lack of sympathy for her financial situation, his willingness to tolerate the physical abuse of *any* woman just because she cheated, is the product of a mind that is even viler than hers. Some things are not acceptable in a civilized world, and anyone with a pair of balls between their legs and calling themselves a man understands that. Cheating is one of them. Spousal abuse is another.
@Anon She is afraid of violance and she did not get violance. He did well to close the telephone. They have not common child, against my story "Different Gyms Do Train The Body Better", She is not his bussines. His bussines is Brenda Sue and her daughter!
You dial 911 and handle violence.
Because Asshole didn't get the shit beaten out of him for pursuing wifey in the first place. Hubby should have gone after the slimy bastard and put him in a fuckin' hurt locker from the word go! Hell, I would have put him under the parking lot! HUBBY GOT FED ANOTHER MAN'S CREAMPIE! That right there is grounds for justifiable homicide.
So yeah, 4 Stars.
i agree with you ID except when the Ex-called she wanted a white knight to come to her rescue and he was past it by then. but the ass kicking should have been administered just not at that time. either before the divorce was final or in a few years when he did not expect it.
As soon as he saw them at the party together, he needed to go have a Talk with Asshole. if the Talk didn't work, he should have escalated it to a full blown Discussion.
For reference: Talk = Veiled Threats
Discussion = Old School Curb Stomp
Jerry knew as soon as he saw her with asshole she was cheating. He just couldn't prove it. When he could he left as fast as he could. Why didn't he beat the crap out of him? Because it was her that cheated. He was just a live dildo. Also she had a lot of balls asking Jerry for help. She should have known better.
A man who fucks another mans wife needs his ass kicked bu good but not because the ex calls and asks for help. He seduced her. Lunches at first then afternoon delight and them more for months. He really was more than a dildo he needed to be worked over.
they want you to fix it back to Zero plus 1. TK U MLJ LV NV
her world is destroyed
made me smile :)
What shite. A hurting cuckolds pathetic fantasy. 1*
No emotion...just boring, I hated the wife in this story.
No one must deal with cheaters. Cheaters soon or later will find punishment...The cheated always know that the lover will not want a cheater...The lover just want to use the cheater. The cheater soon or later will find that truth...A little lame, but a good story...
I like to read stories where a man is a man. This guy had 2 bad marriages but after the first one he was prepared. I think he was very smart to have money set aside and to not want children right away. As other comments have said, once trust is destroyed, love is not enough. I agree with everything he did, he didn't want to know why, how, etc., no counseling, talking or anything else, just good bye. The only thing that I disagree with is when she gave him the cream-pie, that would have called for some type of revenge against both cheaters.
I'm glad you don't write anymore.
He drove his wife away
Your statement is totally twisted and false. She drove HIM away. No sane human being would remain attached to a spouse that did that. It turns out that she is the one who lost.
Right approach to infidelity. But such a cold soul. Quite probably he did drive her away. But she still cheated and threw her life away.
As for the writing, poor. Conversation not very realistic. No attempt to expand the story. No attempt to paint a picture for the reader. Very static and monotone.
Dry, unfeeling, unemotional, stiff...what other adjective is there to describe this?
This might have made a decent outline or synopsis for a story, but a story?
Seems almost like a cliff notes version of a story. The raw material is there but there is not enough to invoke much emotion
he's only happy if the wife is getting gangbanged by all his cousins
Felt like your characters were reading from a script - and not very well at that.
A cheating cunt wife destroyed and our faithful loving husband in the arms of a new faithful woman. Don't you just love a happy ending?
Jerry’s been in 2 failed relationships and I like how he left shay to her own devices. But the story seems that it is not quite finished. Did Jerry finally find his soul mate with Sue and her daughter?
As far as criticism, I thought the writing was a bit dry and stiff. They story flowed well, but was a bit stilted with the exchanges. Overall it is a good story. Thank you for the good read. Please keep writing.
could have been so much better
Another story with no ending...what the hell hawkeye, what do you think when you write a piece of something with no ending...fuck all I guess. And Literotica why do you print this unfinished stuff, I was going to say shit but it isn't ...it's just not finished. Finish the story for gripes sake!!!!
It's like reading a comic book.....very poor ...... very poor, I give it a one.
Previous comments are correct...no ending! Here, we also have, a tough marine who lets the blond haired shit get away! Really???
Just a mashup of every other poorly written LW story on the site. No thought, creativity, heart, feeling or, for me, interest. I wish I had the last twenty minutes back.
Question to the author: why do you want to write? What do you want to say that every other poor writer hasn't already said?
Sorry dude but I couldn't finish the story. The dialogue was awful, situations were poorly manufactured and basically just too contrived and unrealistic.
Keep working on it.
Just another two-dimensional, cardboard cutout character story. No subtlety, no character development, no interest. What are you, twelve? I can tell you're never had a real relationship that got past the name-calling stage. What a boring piece of crap.
This story seem to have had a problem being managed. It started telling about a ex-wife who had made him not a feeling person that could completely trust anyone. Okay we know what happened to the second wife What happened to the first wife? Did he fix her wagon and get revenge on the people she cheated with? For a person so scorned he didn't do much to anyone. You only left me with a incompletely story that failed to come close to what was hinted at in the first section where you told us about the Jerry the wimp who thought he wasn't. Yes, Shay had him pegged correctly he was her wimp and seeing how inaccurately you described him He did go back and help Shay. He Dropped Breand Sue and her child because she had a baby with another man.👎🏽
This may just be the most stupid story in the history of literorica.
Flat, two-dimensional characters, stilted conversations, jerky stop/start action, jumping around all over some perceived timeline known only to the author. What a mess. If you're serious about writing, you need to sit down and outline what you want to say and then make sure you cover all the bases.
Your dialog needs a lot of work, the conversations you write are unemotional and unreal, just totally unbelievable. Maybe you should spend ALL your time trolling much better authors poking fun at their stories and calling them cuckolds. Stop wasting your time writing, you're not any good at it. Now, turn off your computer, get out of your basement and go to bed. Your mommy wants you to take out the trash before you put your jammies on.
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