And, good grief, learn the difference between "crouch" (which is what you wrote) and "crotch" (which is what you meant).
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Anonymous08/13/12
Ugh.
Well this was the worst thing I've read in a long time.
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Anonymous08/13/12
TERRIBLE STORY
There is NOTHING good about this story. If you're going to write a non-consent it has to be actually sexy, not just some horrific story of domestic violence and rape. This is awful!
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Anonymous08/13/12
shit
This sucked
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Anonymous08/14/12
bad
Do everyone a favor and stop writing. I love noncon. stories but this was garbage.
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Anonymous08/14/12
-5 stars
Worst story ever. Do the world a favor and never write again!
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Anonymous08/14/12
its nice
i found it a nice story and waiting for second part
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Anonymous08/14/12
Hahahaha. Ah, no.
My favorite line? "If you like reading this story give me good replies and I will write you a continuation that will feed your lust." Honey, I wouldn't let you feed my toilet with this crap.
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Anonymous08/16/12
Was there a point?
Next time organize your thoughts before you start writing. What the hell was the point of the factory? What was the point of any of it? Dude, get a clue read a book and try again
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Anonymous08/17/12
:(
There is nothing erotic in this story. :( There is pain and loss of self for the woman. There is jealousy and unhappyness for the 2nd husband and I hope, a jail cell for the 1st husband. I'm a fan of non-consentual, and a bride makes it even better, but for a woman... the erotocism of non-con lays in being desired and won over. This reads as a true rape, a crime. If you choose to write again, please help this poor woman and husband find happyness, together. Thank you. :(
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Anonymous08/17/12
wtf
This is the worst story i ever read :(
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Anonymous08/20/12
wtf
This story is just sad. It does not belong on an erotic story website.
English
Terrible. Simply terrible.
And, good grief, learn the difference between "crouch" (which is what you wrote) and "crotch" (which is what you meant).
Ugh.
Well this was the worst thing I've read in a long time.
TERRIBLE STORY
There is NOTHING good about this story. If you're going to write a non-consent it has to be actually sexy, not just some horrific story of domestic violence and rape. This is awful!
shit
This sucked
bad
Do everyone a favor and stop writing. I love noncon. stories but this was garbage.
-5 stars
Worst story ever. Do the world a favor and never write again!
its nice
i found it a nice story and waiting for second part
Hahahaha. Ah, no.
My favorite line? "If you like reading this story give me good replies and I will write you a continuation that will feed your lust." Honey, I wouldn't let you feed my toilet with this crap.
Was there a point?
Next time organize your thoughts before you start writing. What the hell was the point of the factory? What was the point of any of it? Dude, get a clue read a book and try again
:(
There is nothing erotic in this story. :( There is pain and loss of self for the woman. There is jealousy and unhappyness for the 2nd husband and I hope, a jail cell for the 1st husband. I'm a fan of non-consentual, and a bride makes it even better, but for a woman... the erotocism of non-con lays in being desired and won over. This reads as a true rape, a crime. If you choose to write again, please help this poor woman and husband find happyness, together. Thank you. :(
wtf
This is the worst story i ever read :(
wtf
This story is just sad. It does not belong on an erotic story website.
This is..
Absolute shit.
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