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Excellent start
As usual your story seems to have life to it.
DG Hear
I was going to submit this story all at once but it's over 20,000 words. There are 6 chapters. and I'm submitting them daily. Four are submitted already. Thank you to all who read and comment. It's always appreciated.
DG
Made my day...
Your stories always are well written and interesting. Thanks for getting the next chapters out so quick. Thanks to a fine writer.
Great story
This is shaping up to be a good story. just wanted to know about the moral dilemma's that he is facing along with the other characters. Where is Tina's wild side or mary's loving side? Great Story and can't wait to read more
Well Begun..
You are one of the best authors in LIT, and I look forward to reading the chapters that follow.
You might ask Estragon to consider the following:
1. Use "whom" when appropriate, as in "I wasn't sure who I liked being around more," and also "who I got along with." Many other examples of this.
2. And try the subjunctive occasionally, as in your "She told me many times she wished Mark was more like me."
Excellent start...
But I do wish you would get over the short chapters posted apart and just post it all at once.
SCHOOL DAYS DEAR OLD FASHIONED SCHOOL DAYS
and the remembering brings back bitter-sweet thoughts TK U MLJ LV NV
Very interesting central characters
Hope that the rest continues at this level! It is amazing how people get lucky when they are young and only discover it years later. But there are a lot of unlucky folk out there too.
5*****
Interesting story.........
Quite good
This is quite good, very interesting, well written and thought through.
You've set the hook now, I am looking forward to spending some time reading the rest of it today.
This episode gets 5***** from me. Thanks for writing.
Regards,
-Pultoy
How F- - - ed up is that?
As an author, your are great, perhaps one of the best. The story was good; the ending, however SUCKED! In my opinion, it barely rates a "4".
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