Congratulations on your first story. I found it very realistic. I'd be very curious to see how you could develop it into a series. Specifically, how does having sucked his friends change the nature of his relationship with them and his wife? Is there a shift in the power balance? What's next? Keep writing!!!!
Very good for your first story. I need to find a poker game like that.
Really loved this story, especially when he comes in his own pants without having to touch himself. That got me super horny
If writing more, be true to your instincts.
Thanks for your comments. I will be continuing the story. In fact I originally had the first two parts written. I was not happy with the second part and rewrote it. I will be giving it another pass before sending to the editor.
seems like a great way to pay off a debt.
I know I wouldn't mind
Fantastic! Please write a follow-up!
so who wants to play poker?
Good story, nice story line and very arousing. You had a few grammar mistakes (one right at the beginning) but other than that it was a great job. Keep it up, you are well on your way to becoming a great hot erotica author.
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