All Comments on '4 Weeks Ch. 02'

by abbo27

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m48gunnerm48gunnerover 11 years ago
What

What would make this better is that Mark finds out and turns the tables on both of them.....consequences and revenge would complete this story!

CatsmineCatsmineover 11 years ago
Picking up speed

The combination of action and the submissive's point-of-view improves this concept considerably. Keep this up and Chapter 7 should be an award winner.

Lisa469Lisa469over 11 years ago
We need day 3 and ....

You have a great start! Would be nice to see this finished.

lonerancherlonerancherabout 10 years ago
wonderful

It has all the elements a wanton slut/whore that is caught like a deer in the headlights.

AnonymousAnonymousover 9 years ago
well ok

nice start with just a pussy play. I need more. Thanks

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