I like the story, but just a few suggestions, it's taut not taunt, taunt is to make fun of someone, tease them. Also the order or words to help it flow better. 'I just was lonely', better as 'I was just lonely' 'He secretly had liked her', better as 'He had secretly liked her'
I need my max and megan!! When am I gonna get that??
I'm working on it anon...I keep getting distracted by this thing called "life". Dunno what that is all about! Lol.
Shame there is no more
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I like the story, but just a few suggestions, it's taut not taunt, taunt is to make fun of someone, tease them.
Also the order or words to help it flow better.
'I just was lonely', better as 'I was just lonely'
'He secretly had liked her', better as 'He had secretly liked her'
I need my max and megan!! When am I gonna get that??
I'm working on it anon...I keep getting distracted by this thing called "life". Dunno what that is all about! Lol.
Lovely story
Shame there is no more
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