by thespeck
this reads more like a "what i did on my summer vacation" essay, but there are a lot of hot scenes contained in here.
you should pick one and flesh it out, providing all the detail of the flirting and teasing that lead up to the fucking!
try writing from the third-person perspective too. it's hotter than "I did this" and "I did that."
there's 4 or 5 good stories packed into this post and I'd love to read them one day.