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by Anonymous

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by Anonymous08/28/12

please use quotation marks

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by Anonymous08/28/12

Very Good, But...

Your story was FemDom, which is my favorite category. That is good. It's obvious the couple is in love, which is great. The action, scenes, and his reaction are all very hot.

But, you really need to brush up on your grammar. There are a ton spelling mistakes and you didn't use a single set of quotation marks, despite there being lots of dialogue.

Please continue writing. You just need to polish up the stories a bit before submitting them.

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