Two Moms, Two Laps, Two Hours

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Pretty damn good and ridiculous (in a good way) at the same time. Tons better than 90% of the garbage that gets posted here daily.

Ugh that was bad, even for something non-serious

Delightful Demented Depravity !

I've read & enjoyed the two stories mentioned in preamble. But to add the Lone Star twist of wild boar hunting, sister rivalry , near-discovery by father with penchant for firearms?. WelI I just can't wait for TTT to take this cast of characters 'on the road again' in confined but unbounded quarters.

Pretty Damn Good

Been coming to this site for many years. One of the best stories I have read in a while.

Thanks

Hey ugh !!!! Take a trip !!!!!

Congrats.... a involved but very sexy story !

Thanks Don

far too long

This was far too long for a single unit and should likely have been split into at least 2 parts. The best and easiest to read are stories that will fit 3 pages beyond which interest declines rapidly.

Don't leave out a word

I'm amazed that anyone would think your stories are too long. Don't ever change your style at all. Consider the thousands of one-page-snapshots that fill this site. In blessed contrast to them, your stories are well developed. The detail adds believability, making the erotic payoff more enjoyable.

There will always be those who prefer soda pop to a fine wine. You are one of the best writers on this site, contributing too rarely as far as I'm concerned. Don't stop. Don't change. And you'll always get my 5 stars.

not long at all!

writing is all about the details, so that people can believe it, and be affected by it. Of course a story should be trimmed, so that there is no unnecessary part. Cheers!

Nice!

Thanks for sharing another great story!

Interest wains rapidly after 3 pages?

Only an American (globally renowned for their short attention span) Anon would say that !

Perfect

I loved the slow build up...the length of the story was perfect.

wow

wow great story, could read it over and over. cant wait for next story. hope you make a sequal to this one

Thank you!

Outstanding work! Enjoyable read, sexy, fun, naughty. Well written and nice to have some story/build-up, made it worth the read. Thanks!

Sweet merciful Jesus! A Hot Summer Story!

I like the various bits you put into the chili in this story- the male bonding, the uneasiness of Colin needing a sense of belonging, and the sibling rivalry between the sisters that led to the humpathon in the back seat!
It's very obvious there's respect for the dad by all parties which is a nice treat, but Mom deciding to make any further incest with her son a sneaky affair away from home speaks to something she's having trouble facing .I'd love to see how this plays out! XXXcellent story!

I like the story but the ending sucked.

The 2 thing did not like was the mom tell the son 1) "If you fuck her, you'll never have me again," she said softly. "You'll never have my mouth or my tight little rear. Never fill this pussy again." so he can't fuck aunt ever WTF that just cold and made him in to lier because he told her he make it up to her later when they had to switch moms. 2) no sex in the house if she had said said no sex in my and your dad bed I could have live with that,The house has more room than one bedroom. And the competitive side the sisters had in the story why didn't you leave no sex with aunt out made ending like she walked to Jeremy told him if think we are competitive outside bedroom whate until you and Colin get us in the bedroom. Just give me until in morning I have him seeing it our way. Then she could had Colin that night and Jeremy could made it up to his aunt that night.

Not Long Enough!

Outstanding story, and as such, it needs a part 2 where the sisters really patch things up between them while competing for Jeremy's cock.

I agree with perl10.

This is at least a 2-4 chapter story.
So much possibility.
But what you have offered here is OUTSTANDING.
No joke.
One of the best, wellthought strokes with background I've read on here.
Thank you so much.

Lucky guy!!!

I thoroughly enjoyed the story even if it was a little tongue-in-cheek with the obliviousness and isolation of the three different locations in the car. Can't imagine not knowing someone was getting humped in the seat next to you. Putting that all aside, it was a great story and although I couldn't keep up with Jeremy I did my best LOL.

Apostrophes?

The italics at the beginning include "It is about Aunt's and their Nephews, as well as Mother's and Son's". So, do you think apostrophes are purely for decoration? They shouldn't be capitalised either; only capitalise them if you use them as names.

Welcome back

Welcome back ...have missed your writing..

Great start more please?

Colin should have gotten a little further with Jeremy's mom maybe she lied when she told him he only felt her up? Maybe we can see what really happend in a new chpater?

more!

Would love to hear this from Colin's point of view. Would also like to see a continuation.

Very Nice

I do not think Colin's POV would be interesting given how immature he was, but I think an extra page would have made much sense.

Thanks.

Very nice entry in the "Riding On Laps" genre.

Take the grammar Nazi's complaints with a grain of salt. The story was terrific, especially with two moms/aunts involved. I'd like to see a sequel, if not several more chapters. I've read the other stories you cite at the beginning of this one, and it's as good as the best of them, if not a little better, since this was a fresh story and not one I've read and re-read. I have to wonder if Jeremy might not want to find a computer or console driving or flight sim game to entice his mom into "riding the lap" again, heh-heh.

Great Story

You should write more of those. It was an easy read. Thanks

Hot!

I hope you expand upon this story. I would LOVE to read about Jeremy getting his mom alone time and time again...

^__^

Good story. Nice work, thanks!

Love it

Nicely writen. Very pleasant reading. Thank you.

I loved it also!!!I found the story late last night and fell asleep just after starting to read. I slept in desk chair all night and woke up rested lol. But read a few lines and grabbed a coffee and finished it. I love a great story like this, well done.

thanks

hey man it was great i love your way of Writing.....you know you start evry think slowly and beautiful .and you dont have hurry to go to (fuck part) thats very good .
i hope see more from you in this way .....

great

great story. I love the backstory, and psychological detail you give your characters, it adds a whole other layer of verisimilitude to the story. Awesome. Is there a part two? That would just make my week!

great work

ive been droppin in an readin stories here for a good 6-7 yrs, and this is the closest to perfect ive found. just enough to keep u wanting more, and not to much to make it a crappy story. great great work

WOW

Just a bit too long BUT FANTASTIC! Would LOVE for there to be sequels!!!

Not long.

Would be better if it was longer!

Thanks for the comments

Thanks to everyone for the comments. I do read them all and I take them to heart.

There is a sequel to this, but I wanted the first story to be able to stand alone on it's own merit. Two Moms, Two Laps, Two Hours will be followed by Two Moms, Two Laps, The Next Day, and Two Moms, Two Laps, the Next Week. It's a pretty involved story, the key element picked out in many comments is the father relationship. Plus Penny the GF. And of course, solving the sister's problems. I will post the followup after the contest is over.

I'm embarrassed by the number of grammar errors in this story - I counted over 12. The grammar police have every right to call me on this. My apologies, I was in a hurry to get the story in for the labor day weekend, and I typed the introduction in while submitting, so it's especially ugly. I will clean it up when the contest is over. I know those type of errors distract me from a good story.

Thanks to all, and keep your eyes open. I have more than twenty chapters of four separate stories ready for posting, including 4 more CvsN entries, and will be submitting them after a few more rounds of editing. It's been a while, and they've been backing up. .

super Hot

I love it...! MORE

Oh My...This story is amazing!

Great story. Looking forward to your next one.

I think Dad knows about Jeremy and his mom. Please write about Jeremy and Colin's sisters.

Great story.

Make sure you write a continuation and maybe get all of them into a mass orgy. That would pop my cork I think.

Incredible 2 hours!!!

I just finish your story and I gotta say it's great. The beginning is a little long but as soon as they are in the car it's starts to get really good.

The part between aunt and nephew was exciting but the mother/son sex was awesome.

In your sequel, please don't bring Collin in the sex part.
I see your story like a repeat of what happen between the two sisters and the dad but it's the son who is in the middle now. But one sister is married (and will stay that way I hope) wereas the other one is free and can use blackmail if she finds out about jeremy and his mother (which won't be too difficult for her)

Poor Father

If only you didn't make the father an honorable man, it killed me imagining his position & being incapable of trusting your own son. Great story regardless, but sometimes I like the generic, neglecting father that isn't deserving of anyone's sympathy

Family frenzy!

Great story. Have to suspect dad is a little more perverse than is immediately apparent and engineered his wife's induction of horny son.
Keep writing please.
Great , great story that kept me coming back for the next page, and the next.

so fucking wet

Ummph,im so fucking wet,juices all over my pussy. GREAT FUCKING
STORY.

Great Story!!!!

Totally well written, awesome story! AnHoa Rifleman

Not my usual type of story...

This isn't my usual type of story (I tend to like the group and "loving wife" stories that you do) but this was pretty awesome. You do a spectacular job of the build-up and conveying sexual tension. The best stories you write (Vegas Gamble, Accidental Nudist Cabin, Our First Swing, Sis-in-Law Incentives, The Perfect Game) all have that build-up, that "Should I or shouldn't I?", that eventually leads to people being overwhelmed with sexual desire until they can't control themselves. This story absolutely has that.

Well done, sir. Can't wait until I see the other new ones.

Woweee

Marvelous story, great tension. Makes me wish I could go hunting.

Didn't feel real enough.

Sure all of the action was pretty hot, and the little story about the family leading up to it all was a nice touch to draw you in, but it ended up feeling fake. What I mean by fake is how suddenly the mom (not the aunt so much) was willing to just jump her sons bones so quickly, and then all of the dirty talk that sounded like it was straight out of some cheesy 80's skin flick. Its almost as if this was written FOR the incest fans (what mother lover wouldn't want to hear their mom urging them to "fill your mommy's pussy up"?) but I find the hottest incest stories are the more realistic kind. Also, lets be honest, there is NO WAY they could have done all of the things they did (especially the aunt) without EVERYBODY knowing what was going on. Maybe not in the beginning, but DEFINITELY by the end.

Bending Reality

In response to the story not feeling real enough according to 'anonymous'...

True. That's why I had the little intro, explaining it's meant to be in the vein of Mom Takes A Ride, and Sitting On MY Son's Lap, and I do point out that it's more than a little absurd. C'mon, stripping his mother in the front seat? Like there's no other traffic on the road? Doing it in the parking lot of CVS, and in the neighborhood? Definitely calls on the reader to be willing to suspend reality a bit. I tried to justify the actions and give reasonable cover, but no two ways about it, definitely over the top. Personally, the Aunt stuff is almost reasonable, with the Dad somewhat complicit in what's going on (as you'll find out in the next entry in the series). But the Mom scene, especially taking off her shirt, is beyond the pale. Pretty ridiculous, I know, but for me, the author, it was pretty hot, and ultimately that's who I write for...

Thanks for the well thought out and pretty accurate comment. These type of comments are my favorites, giving insight into what people have issues with, so I can work on that.

In response to Segnity...

Another great comment, addressing a major concern of mine. The father issue is the real dilemma, I agree. Mom and Son both love the Dad, completely and without reservation. And he's a good man. There's the rub. Both Son and Wife have betrayed his trust. No matter how you look at it, that's a bad thing. I didn't want the cliched absent father, or worse, the stories that ignore his existence altogether. But is it possible to make it up to him...? Perhaps not completely, the betrayal is there, but enough to make things workout. That's the crux of the matter, and to me, even more important than resolving the sister's competition. We'll have to see what happens in Chapter's two and three (hopefully by chapter 4 - which I have outlined but not written - it's mostly resolved).

In response to Baloney_Pony

Damn, I wish I'd thought of that part about the computer/console game and more lap riding! Great little plot bunny. I'm going to let that one percolate a bit. Thanks for a great idea!

loved it

Personally I thought It was a fantastic story, well written and constructed, 5 stars no problem, well done!

Amazing

This was a phenomenal story! Keep up it up!

Just about perfect.

I normally don't bother with long-winded stories preferring 2 to 3 page ones instead, but this one flowed so well and was so engrossing that I hardly noticed how long it was. The reluctant mom has to be the main ingredient and you hit that right on the nose. Thanks for taking the time to write an incredibly erotic story. Can't wait for the next one.