The first flash story was well written , we could almost guess what the characters would do next.
The second part was horrible with bad subplots and worse characterization (even if this were a stand alone). As the first commenter mentioned , the guy is a good man not an idiot.
Whether you like it or not -Caesar's wife must be above suspicion.
She is the wife of a Vicar and has multiple affairs (each one increasing exponentially the chance of public knowledge and humiliation for him)
She confesses to these multiple affairs
He knows about these affairs
His reaction - he undresses and muses about forgiving her as is his wont.
WTF!!!!
This is not normal reaction from any man, be it priest or pariah.
Matt you fucked this one up big time. The only way to save this is to write chapter 3. You know what you have to write. If you don't you project yourself as a different category author. You know what I mean. Man up!
Hey user - church of England are reverend. Catholic priests are Father. Dog collar refer to the all white collars c of e wear, priests only wear. White for front part. Not a bad story though.
OK, so you made some errors on the Queen's Church of England. The notion that we should forgive those who repent is difficult but important part of Christianity. I liked that you brought that point out. Also the point that is better for the one who strayed to see the error of their ways on their own, not through some calamitous confrontation, unless that was unavoidable'
. However this story was way too short, and for that I gave it a three 'keep on writing'.
Also What did you mean by "... enough rope so that I could keep a hold of you to stop you from straying into danger,"
I look forward to your explanation of that enigmatic sentence.
CHILLEY
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Anonymous09/04/12
To "Cant"
Before you spout off about collars which Catholic priests wear, you should do some research. Like Nuns, Catholic priests also join different orders. Different orders wear different collars.
Liked (and admitted to being taken by) Ch.1, and I thought it was complete and should not be continued! I was wrong! Although this continuation is 'après-sex' it has its own very neat 'zinger!' and I have given it a five to 'make-up' for the 'four' I gave Ch.1! In other words, I think the pair deserve 'Hot' status!
BTW - given that this continuation was NOT originally planned as a series, I forgive the failure to mark Ch.1 as such!!!
BTW2 - if it is within Anglican policy-bounds for clergy to be 'monogamically' kinky (i.e. oral, anal, titty-fuck, etc. with the spouse) - I would not object to a Ch.3, assuming your Muse keeps on musing!
Okay, well "To err is human to forgive is devine" that is apparently what the Church people of every faith around the world tell us. Sorry Matt but a one time slip, maybe, just maybe forgiven but to have cheated on a husband multiple times, over 18 years? even a churchman would have some difficulty forgiving that idea. I certainly wouldn't forgive or forget. Also Matt you had the wife say she didn't want to Cuckold or Humiliate the husband, sorry but cheating on your husband IS cuckolding and by it's very nature to most men that would be a humiliation. Anyway good luck with your next story.
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Anonymous09/05/12
Actually x-Gary-x, it's a quote from Alexander Pope.
;)
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Anonymous09/05/12
Pauls wimp and a closet cume eater for putting up with and forgiving a cheating whore
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Anonymous09/05/12
cheaters remorse on her part and she's damaged goods. some things are simplly best discarded.
It was well written, flowed nicely and reasonably plausible. All the way through. Unfortunately, the plot, or more likely the characters within the plot stank. Terribly. Such a woman, and I believe many exist, is not a likeable person. The chap she was having an affair with was also a fucking softcock. Unbelievable. And her husband. Well, you can be a good strong holy man without being effeminate. Like this guy Paul who knew of her affair(s) and readily agreed to go to counselling. Clearly pandering to his female side. You can forgive mate, but you don't have to live with it....
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Anonymous09/05/12
Well written. Emotional. Hopeful.
People cheat. We are human and we will fuck up. The question is: what then? Some choose to go for revenge, others enjoy the pain and cuckolding or ignore it, pretending it doesn't exist. And finally, some will forgive.
So long as we don't compromise the law or our integrity, we gotta do what we gotta do. 5/5
I'm just bummed out by it. I enjoyed your dialogue between the wife and lover. I thought it was an interesting exploration of the wife's fucked up head-space. I get the hubby's position, but I have to wonder at how long he knew/suspected the affair. Even Jesus Christ himself would not tolerate multiple affairs in silence, I would think. At some point, he would have a "come to me" talk. I appreciated that the wife had a moment of clarity, and then went to counselling to define her emotions/thinking. It made sense that she decided to end the affair right away, but that she would confess to hubby? I'm all for coming clean (in most cases of infidelity-though not all), but that is a big and dangerous step; one wonders about a counsellor who advises such a step at such an early stage in therapy.
Still, man, you can write, get inside different character's heads, and weave a tale. I'm a fan.
is he able to actually forgive her? Can she actually stay faithful this time? Realistically even if he is able to forgive her and they stay together he would definitely have some deep seated anger, resentment, and trust issues. You should really follow up with another detailing what happens next
“but try to be pleased that we had to end it the way we ended it”
Yes, be pleased that they weren’t caught, and are able to end it on their own terms without violence or other unpleasant repercussions from being found out.
“She was going to confess to him. She had to.”
NO! She DOESN’T! She will only hurt her husband in a vain attempt at easing her guilty conscience. Better she should suffer in silence.
LOL, didn't realize her husband was a Vicar, maybe she DID have to confess!
English
He's a Reverend, so what?
Where I come from we have a saying: God's requires that you be good, not stupid.
Copout
The first flash story was well written , we could almost guess what the characters would do next.
The second part was horrible with bad subplots and worse characterization (even if this were a stand alone). As the first commenter mentioned , the guy is a good man not an idiot.
Whether you like it or not -Caesar's wife must be above suspicion.
She is the wife of a Vicar and has multiple affairs (each one increasing exponentially the chance of public knowledge and humiliation for him)
She confesses to these multiple affairs
He knows about these affairs
His reaction - he undresses and muses about forgiving her as is his wont.
WTF!!!!
This is not normal reaction from any man, be it priest or pariah.
Fucked Up
Matt you fucked this one up big time. The only way to save this is to write chapter 3. You know what you have to write. If you don't you project yourself as a different category author. You know what I mean. Man up!
can catholic clergy marry?
my bad, matt in UK. i assume anglican clergy can get hitched (and divorced too, i imagine).
typical UK
WIMP HUSBAND- 1*
THE CONFESSIONAL HOLDS MORE SECRETS
and some may even feel guilty because of them, TK U MLJ LV NV
Guess what
Hey user - church of England are reverend. Catholic priests are Father. Dog collar refer to the all white collars c of e wear, priests only wear. White for front part. Not a bad story though.
Good story so far
OK, so you made some errors on the Queen's Church of England. The notion that we should forgive those who repent is difficult but important part of Christianity. I liked that you brought that point out. Also the point that is better for the one who strayed to see the error of their ways on their own, not through some calamitous confrontation, unless that was unavoidable'
. However this story was way too short, and for that I gave it a three 'keep on writing'.
Also What did you mean by "... enough rope so that I could keep a hold of you to stop you from straying into danger,"
I look forward to your explanation of that enigmatic sentence.
CHILLEY
To "Cant"
Before you spout off about collars which Catholic priests wear, you should do some research. Like Nuns, Catholic priests also join different orders. Different orders wear different collars.
Great Muse.
Liked (and admitted to being taken by) Ch.1, and I thought it was complete and should not be continued! I was wrong! Although this continuation is 'après-sex' it has its own very neat 'zinger!' and I have given it a five to 'make-up' for the 'four' I gave Ch.1! In other words, I think the pair deserve 'Hot' status!
BTW - given that this continuation was NOT originally planned as a series, I forgive the failure to mark Ch.1 as such!!!
BTW2 - if it is within Anglican policy-bounds for clergy to be 'monogamically' kinky (i.e. oral, anal, titty-fuck, etc. with the spouse) - I would not object to a Ch.3, assuming your Muse keeps on musing!
WOW!!!
Part one's ending took me a bit by surprise but this....well I'll be! Damnit..I liked it!
A chap I knew was a vicar (CoE)
His wife cheated on him. Though that was worse, in a way, as it was with the choir master. Hey. There's another story, right there!
Okay, well "To err is human to forgive is devine" that is apparently what the Church people of every faith around the world tell us. Sorry Matt but a one time slip, maybe, just maybe forgiven but to have cheated on a husband multiple times, over 18 years? even a churchman would have some difficulty forgiving that idea. I certainly wouldn't forgive or forget. Also Matt you had the wife say she didn't want to Cuckold or Humiliate the husband, sorry but cheating on your husband IS cuckolding and by it's very nature to most men that would be a humiliation. Anyway good luck with your next story.
Actually x-Gary-x, it's a quote from Alexander Pope.
;)
Pauls wimp and a closet cume eater for putting up with and forgiving a cheating whore
cheaters remorse on her part and she's damaged goods. some things are simplly best discarded.
Well written tripe.
It was well written, flowed nicely and reasonably plausible. All the way through. Unfortunately, the plot, or more likely the characters within the plot stank. Terribly. Such a woman, and I believe many exist, is not a likeable person. The chap she was having an affair with was also a fucking softcock. Unbelievable. And her husband. Well, you can be a good strong holy man without being effeminate. Like this guy Paul who knew of her affair(s) and readily agreed to go to counselling. Clearly pandering to his female side. You can forgive mate, but you don't have to live with it....
Well written. Emotional. Hopeful.
People cheat. We are human and we will fuck up. The question is: what then? Some choose to go for revenge, others enjoy the pain and cuckolding or ignore it, pretending it doesn't exist. And finally, some will forgive.
So long as we don't compromise the law or our integrity, we gotta do what we gotta do. 5/5
To my Anon friend, who is Gary?
Thanks for the comments! JohnDoe
She cheated because she was a broken person. How or why? Will there be a chapter 3? Maybe...
I like the twist at the end
Alhough her husband is only human and could have a hard time ever trusting her again.
Well written but...
I'm just bummed out by it. I enjoyed your dialogue between the wife and lover. I thought it was an interesting exploration of the wife's fucked up head-space. I get the hubby's position, but I have to wonder at how long he knew/suspected the affair. Even Jesus Christ himself would not tolerate multiple affairs in silence, I would think. At some point, he would have a "come to me" talk. I appreciated that the wife had a moment of clarity, and then went to counselling to define her emotions/thinking. It made sense that she decided to end the affair right away, but that she would confess to hubby? I'm all for coming clean (in most cases of infidelity-though not all), but that is a big and dangerous step; one wonders about a counsellor who advises such a step at such an early stage in therapy.
Still, man, you can write, get inside different character's heads, and weave a tale. I'm a fan.
Interesting take there -
So this one truly does have some level of obligation to forgive her and try more -
BUT not necessarily continue to live with her - he can forgive her - absolve her - and still divorce her and live past her - that is not unchristian.
Loved the final twist. Great story and well written. Top marks.
Nah - cheaters go to hell
And they get the divorce they deserve
SMALL PAUL HAS A BIG HEART
but can it be that large. TK U MLJ LV NV
part 3 needed
is he able to actually forgive her? Can she actually stay faithful this time? Realistically even if he is able to forgive her and they stay together he would definitely have some deep seated anger, resentment, and trust issues. You should really follow up with another detailing what happens next
Thoughts
“but try to be pleased that we had to end it the way we ended it”
Yes, be pleased that they weren’t caught, and are able to end it on their own terms without violence or other unpleasant repercussions from being found out.
“She was going to confess to him. She had to.”
NO! She DOESN’T! She will only hurt her husband in a vain attempt at easing her guilty conscience. Better she should suffer in silence.
LOL, didn't realize her husband was a Vicar, maybe she DID have to confess!
Forgive her, my ass!
BTB
Wow
Closet fag
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