All Comments on 'Decisions, Decisions'

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AnonymousAnonymousover 11 years ago
confusing

seems like you had two different story lines going, couldn't decide which one to use and somehow ended up merging the two - very confusing to read

Formbdy2k2011Formbdy2k2011over 11 years ago
Whaat?!

When you tried to divide the stories, you almost lost me and probably your other readers as well. The ending was good when you brought everything back in focus.

AnonymousAnonymousover 11 years ago
u should have ritten it as 2 seperate stories!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

done!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

AnonymousAnonymousover 11 years ago
Stopped reading

It got too confusing to read so I stopped less than halfway through the first page.

tazz317tazz317over 11 years ago
I THINK YOU HAVE A NOVEL IDEA.

multiple stories with one plot and theme. Maybe if you could tie them together a little more. TK U MLJ LV NV

AnonymousAnonymousover 11 years ago
Interesting..

Guess those readers who can't keep two things in mind at the same time would have trouble with this. Perhaps reading other literature might help???

Pretty good effort, all in all.

AnonymousAnonymousover 11 years ago
TOTAL

CRAP

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